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lack luster

Missing image

lack luster

 

blistering orb

saturated sense

like summer to loss

 

deep amber penetration

sipping salient flesh

to taste

 

miles and millstones

blistering bleeding

panting persistence

 

poignant

adamant addiction

if I could only drive you away

 

relish relief

and cool my soul

 

all to avoid rotting flesh

 

 

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  • creationsfromheart
    July 9, 2008

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    YOu know normally I am not crazy about the freeverse written in this style normally it is just words written with no meaning, you pulled this off very nicely and left me with like a free verse in this style nicely written Amera. Keep up the good writing


  • Swan song gold member
    July 10, 2007
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    I love deep amber penetration that is a wonderous visual. Overall the poem crooned !


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    July 3, 2007

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    Another wonderful entry...very nice free verse.
    Very strong imagery, and a delicate touch with
    your alliteration. Nothing lack luster in this
    piece. Thank you for entering.


  • Myth Of Twilight
    July 1, 2007
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    great peace i loved the read short and sweet is good as well knowing how mutch it sead in so little


    • Amera gold member
      July 1, 2007
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      Thanks, I haven't seen you in a while. It's good to see you.


  • Laura
    July 1, 2007

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    wow this is amazing the alliteration flows just perfect within this perfectly crafted poem. i love this well done love nice to see a free verse hehe xxx


    • Amera gold member
      July 1, 2007
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      Thanks Laura, I was hoping you'd look at it. I bet you thought I couldn't write a free verse. This comment made me smile... see I did it!


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 30, 2007

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    DOLLFACE...I had to go look back up to make sure the author was really YOU! IMpressive, sizzling and classy words grace the page next to My fav Luns artwork..well done, best of luck!


  • Desire gold member
    June 30, 2007

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    Oh MY!


    What images You have brought forth busy bee
    and certainly takes the reader
    on course where the abstract grabs and
    leaves residue behind~
    especially that amber penetration
    Oy~
    Magnificent job!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    June 30, 2007

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    Well, well, well... what have we here? *rubs eyes* It's still there! Wowie Zowie! You are the bomb, lover, I give it 3 Bunnies!


  • RedAquarius
    June 30, 2007

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    What a transition in feeling from you, had I not seen your name, I would not have guessed it - it is amazing and a pleasure to see you exercise such grace with words, in such a different fashion. This is piercing and poignant.


  • Cant-touch-this
    June 30, 2007

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    This is some read very powerful indeed...If I could only drive you away relish relief and cool my soul all to avoid rotting flesh...painful yet understood


  • StarEyes
    June 30, 2007

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    YIKES!!!!!! What a read this is!! The images that you painted in my mind are just amazing!! What a great read this is! Best of luck in the contest!!

    and much love

    Nyetta

    • Amera gold member
      June 30, 2007
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      Nyetta

      Thanks Nyetta, a bit different for me but I wanted to avoid the obvious.

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