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Unconsciously,
brazen interrogation begins
where conscious is chastised,
inundated by recycled reoccurrences;

while pressured thoughts surface
and float

downstream where fate finds
a way in.

Does anyone take notice?


The Lotus petal pulled, detached~
removed from its mud bed,

stirred into current's collaboration
where methods to manipulate

are instigated.

Mother Nature exhales sighs,
displays sympathy
yet the flip side summons;
beckons communion with Faith
alongside Belief-

so what’s left
after going right side up?

Grains of hallowed earth…


Buried voices,
frown outside frame
when familiar eyes
cast worry upon wall flower

immortalized within vase;
liquid nutrients barely visible.

Past bleeds into present
while future coagulates uncertainty.

Does self worth matter
to take such short notice?




 

 

Author notes

Poetic Challenge: Season 4- Round 2
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2336580

This piece Inspired by:
Mwright7212
Sorry Life!
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3112198
Comment:
This piece grabbed me spiritually and I
touched a chord within.
Powerful emotionally...

Requirements:
Part One: You must find a new poet.
This most MUST have joined within the last month.
You are to read some of their poetry,
and be inspired by a poem that they have written.
Leave a detailed comment on their poem,
telling them how you were inspired by their writing. THEN write a poem based on the way the poem made you feel… show me where the inspiration took you.
You MUST then return to their poem,
and leave them a link to your poem.

In a list

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

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  • Arkbear gold member
    July 2, 2007

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    OMG Sissy ~

    The first thing I did was cut & paste this..>>>

     

     

    while pressured thoughts surface
    and float

    downstream where fate finds
    a way in.

    Does anyone take notice?

    Then I kept reading and I wanted to cut

    EACH stanza of this powerful and most

    wisdom penned before my eyes ~

    This is totally an awesome write Des ~

     

    I love the way you dove right into your Poets

     work and gathered his thoughts ~

     

    Ya know....I will say now and here....this is my fav. read thus far~

     

    However......

     

    .....your presentation was not up to par.....but,

     I am not going to hit you on it this time because

    presentation was not required........this time ~

     

    BUT.....if you serve me with simplicity

    of this sort again....when I know you can show your talents off....

    .....I will cut your points down like the nearest oak ~

     

    hehe ~

     

    Seriously though....I luuuuved this entry

     and you will get high praise from me this

    week in part ( 1 ) of this Round ~

     

    Just watch your Presentation next time please ~

     

    Brother Bear ~

     

    99.2

     



  • bird-mad girl
    July 1, 2007

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    this was incredible!
    very beautiful.
    it flowed flawless.

    perfect.
    all the descriptions.
    really moving.

    xoxo


  • luckynsincere
    July 1, 2007

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    Desire.
    Great work on this. It was worded perfectly... I feel that you allowed your talent to work for you here!! Good luck!
    Melanie


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    This one felt personal for me, incredible lines lead you to Gold if you enter this later in a contest Missy. It is beautiful and delivers!! Love it ~tia


  • penman gold member
    June 30, 2007
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    Excellent

    Oh my precious this is so powerful and incredible. Best of luck in the contest.


  • michellemybelle gold member
    June 30, 2007

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    amazing imagery
    perfect message and language of uncertainty for this title
    I love this
    while pressured thoughts surface
    and float

    downstream where fate finds
    a way in.

    great write and good luck in this contest
    blessings to you,
    Michelle


  • blondone
    June 30, 2007

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    deep and powerful poetry written here I must say the words flow with such an ease and the imagery is strong..love the line
    Past bleeds into the present... LOVE THIS


  • StarEyes
    June 30, 2007

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    What a read this one is!!!!!!! WOW!!! Just incredible!! What a great job you did on this one!!! I love it!! Best of luck to you in this contest!!

    andmuch love

    Nettie

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