This one's for
All the young girls
That are just like me
out there in the world
I know what it's like
To feel helpless
And hopeless...
I know what it's like
To be used by guys
And by girls
I know what it's like
To be looked down on
And walked on.
I know what it's like
To lose a loved one
To death
I know what it's like
To feel left out
And alone...
I know what it's like
To starve yourself
And hurt yourself
I've been there,
Done that
I'm here to tell you
Keep your heads up!
Pay no mind to the jerks
At school, soon enough,
You won't ever see them
Ever again!
Be yourself, not someone else...
And never youget,
You're not alone in this!
Don't give up, be strong!
show everyone they are wrong!
Don't give up hope!
People care more than you think...
See what I mean?
Author notes
this is just something I just came up with about 15 minutes ago... (took me that long to write it! lol.) I just decided to write about how I know what a lot of these other girls out there got through... and how I've been through a lot of the same things! you know what I mean? A lot of people, not just girls, will relate to what I've written... ha. I guess it's girls and guys... haha. can someone help me come up with a name for it tho? (I don't want another untitled poem... haha.)
Please tell me what you think
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Being helpless and hopeless is a state that we all have to go through, not just at a young age. It shows the stupidity of this world that it does not know how to handle it. It still has not figured out yet that if all possible is done to give the talents people a chance (instead of putting them down or worse) that this planet would be a better place to live in. Jerks are everywhere, this world is flooded by them, but you are right about the hope. Never give that up - it keeps us alive. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
U
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I really liked this poem. I liked the fact that you are not just writting to one person...
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thanks.
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wow. I have gone through hurting myself, losing a loved one, etc... I could really relate to this poem. This was awesome, I loved it.
Maybe you could cal it, "I can relate" or something like "I know how you feel" "What it's like" Or something...
LOL sorry if that doesn't help, I was just trying
This was a really nice poem. Keep writing!
~Pandy~
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What an amazing poem of encouragement, pain and hope. I really like the repetition and the way you opened up and showed such emotion. great job on this.
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soo damned true i've has so much troble with dicks at school pain is one thing people can give freely and like it
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This is wonderful crimson. I can see so many people being able to relate to this.
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thats some wonderful piece of shit. i like it alot. and its a nice shout out- hopeful type thing.
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This is wonderful sweetheart. Never tell me again that you can't write and can't make words flow...you did it so well here...writing what you feel...from the heart.
Keep up the good work...I am so proud of you.
A title?? How about Been There Done That or maybe You Are Beautiful...we all need to be told that sometimes
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wow amazing and well said. You really have a wonderful talent! It kind of reminds me of though this is more personal of martina mcbride's this one's for the girls. Well done as for a title how about Girls like me or something like that.
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It is inspirational, good job! Quite positive<3
Keep up thee amazing work
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You know i really like this one, but it can also relate to guys.. you know being walked on by girls. .and going through those things.. i know from experience... as for a name.. "To the woman of the world"
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This is such a wonderful piece, very uplifting, I have been there many times. Wonderful job!!
~Michaela~
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this is a really good write, and i like it very much you did a wonderful job, I've gone though/ going through alot of it still... hurting and starving urself.... doing stupid stuff, to please others, or trying to make urself appear perfect so noone sees the inside pain... lol i've been living this for years and u put it out there simply and still made it look great! so keep up the good work!
<3 always Tearstaindangel
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I like this one!!
Have you come up with a title yet?? : ) -
The first half of this comes across and reminds me of a Blink 182 song
That sort of gloomy light/dark song. Yeah. Crazy much?
Great write though, a great message! I'm feeling the same on this.
A title, hmmm.
I know.
Don't give up.
They are wrong.
Helpless.
Stronger than that.
Just a few I'm always getting asked for titles, I find it strange. 
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AWWW
omgoodness I LOVE THIS poem.. really.. I do =] haha. It goes towards a lot of people I know. And so many of my friends are going through some of the stuff mentioned.
"People care more than you think...
See what I mean? "
those two lines at the end make it all more perfect.. i love it and i think im gonna go read more of your work ^.^
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Awsome write. Keep it up.
Amber
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Simple Yet Effective
Yup, I agree that most people will be able to relate to this one somehow. It's good encouragement for those who feel like they are being judged, and a reminder of what is truly important. I think this is actually just the thing I needed today. Thank you for asking me to read your new poems. -
This is a wonderful, caring piece and well written I must add!You are doing a great job at exspressing yourself in your poetry. I remember going through all that you have mentioned in this one back when I was in school too. You are a very talented young lady with a big heart and you sound like you are becoming a very strong person too and overcoming all the things that you have went through.
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it's good
wow that's really really good, I really felt the pain that you put into it.. it's smooth of flow and expresses very well good job all around.
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Pay no mind tot he jerks--- needs 2 be fixed... i rly loved it it's so inspirational... and there is a line beneath that that needs a little fixing 2... just read it u'll catch it.... this deserves like..... 6 smiles
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Very nice poem. I think the title should be Help For the Hopeless, I don't know. lol. Good luck finding a name!
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great poem. But I dont know a good name for it. I mean it is just so great I cant think of one.
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Aye, aye, that's the truth. Good encouraging write here. It's good to let the reader know you've been in their shoes... and doubly good not to let school cruch your spirit! You and everyone else out there who's still in high school (or middle school) just needs to know that you should always be yourself and ignore what everyone else has to say. Once you get into college and after, the world is a lot less judgemental... unless you live in the bible belt of America, like me, lol. But seriously, it's a great thing to be yourself, no matter what. If you like yourself, then no one else's opinion matters and you can be truely happy. Nice write!
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I like this poem, I understand the meaning and I can relate to it.
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A very strong, encouraging, and supportive piece of writing! Well done, sweetie! Thank you for directing me here
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thank you!
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awesome poem here. I can relate to it 2.
xo
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do me a favor let this be the title of the poem. its unique stands out and beautiful. i like this its very deep and why not keep a unique title to a deep poem love? you know i am right. just admit it. its your call though i loved this poem it is giving a good message
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a nice happy poem full of encouragement. nicely done. ~ saddened heart.
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