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The Chameleon

She walks against a wall of pink
And so adopts the shade.
She wanders by another wall
And joins a polka dot parade.

She walks into the midnight light
And morphs into the hue.
Some passerbys look very fine.
And so she wears their pattern too.

She doesn't want to be herself
Because she is afraid
She'll have no friends, but what are these
That only love the characters she's made?

Author notes

written for poetic challenge round 2

I was inspired by this poem: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3135634
I liked the reference to a chameleon particularly.

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  • Arkbear gold member
    July 2, 2007

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    Hmmmmm ~

    Well....here we are in Round 2...part 1 ~

     

    First of all...we have covered the basis on all CAPS at the

    beginning of each line ~

     

    For me....it takes away from the flow ~

     

    OK...now for your review ~

     

    I am not enthusiastic about this write ~

     

    I...as well as Melanie...have seen some of your work....

    ....this is not going to keep you in this Challenge if you do not

    allow the power of your quill to be your best Friend ~

     

    I felt your entry was bland and not on cord

    with your New Poets own entry ~

     

    Your Poet is talking about something Very serious, and

    I felt as if I was reading a review from something

    totally different than what I read on his page ~

     

    I don't enjoy giving poor reviews....yet I

    have to place this as a Very low competing entry ~

     

    I hope you spill your ink everywhere in part 2 ~

     

    Bear ~

     

    93

     


  • tomisb
    July 1, 2007

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    This is wonderful. You caught the franticness of an approval suck, the way they are incredible and still so disconnected from their own magnifecence. And how they will never hear how grand they are.
    I am truly impressed. Love, Tom B.


  • Luckynsincere
    July 1, 2007

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    First of all, I feel that you chose a wonderful piece to inspire your write. It was one of my favorites that were chosen for inspiration. I felt it almost was competition for your own piece. I have read some of your work... I have seen the power of that pen. I felt you have held back a little. I feel you did not give this one hundred percent. I give you a b for effort!!

    MEl


  • no-longer-a-member-
    June 30, 2007
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    Wow... what a way to improve upon the original! I really like this

  • kshleo53
    June 30, 2007

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    nice

    i love this peom! it shows a perfect description to how ppl are afraind to be themselves so they try and act and dress like be like everyone else! awesome job!

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