Painting the Invisible
With a quill and ink,
I begin to trace the words
on piece of parchment.
Words of power,
words of fantasy,
tales never told before,
tales to come,
and legends past.
All on my paper
I do paint.
I am the Enchantress
Painting the invisible
to the mortal eyes
and that world of materialism!
A contest entry
- The Ultimate Goal by N e a r.
20000 points, ended June 2, 2008, 946 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Contest by tears.of.silence.
1000 points, ended April 18, 407 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Nice. That's what this whole human experience is about, isn't it -- trying to paint the invisible on the convas of time and space.
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Lovely Portrait
I like how you extend the metaphor of "painting" throughout this piece. I also like how the word "parchment," in line 3, adds a flavor of antiquity to your poem. I find your title, "Painting the Invisible, intriguing. In the world of materialism, which you mention in your final line, the "invisible" oftentimes gets lost. As blind man, I have found great comfort from the Bible passage that taught me how the visible things are only temporary, but the invisible things are eternal.
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lovely this was very vivid. great work. you've made a 4 for this poem bringing you up to an 84l. thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. kahy
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Golden
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Nooni, you are awesome. I don't know how you manage to write such great poetry all the time. It is like you are overflowing with inspiration all the time. Words are full of power and you are quite the powerful one.
Jess aka stillinnirvana
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You ink spills across the parchment well in expressing fantasy.And weary as these times are. Fantasy is needed to sustain the soul.
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Typical of an enchantress!
I call you "Fantasy Enchantress" Always a pleasure reading your beautiful,unique writes.I just ADORE the title.It sounds like something I could write a poem on .
Strong and powerful meanings within your lines.WELL DONE,Nooni!!
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Ah, the hidden value of poetry! I agree, i really think that poetry can capture all that which art and painting might struggle to portray. A great, deep write, well done. Thanks for your entry in my contest and good luck!
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I loved the last 3 lines, I think it summed up the poem well. Great imagery and a great poem, well done
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Great. Hold on, getting trying to chat!
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Is good!! Is very good!! I like the idea of the enchanteress!! Well done and continue like this!!!
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Nice
This poem is philosophical at a particular level and it certainly has got all elements that can certainly make it a worthy poem. I enjoyed the use of poetical tools. All the best.
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wow. beautiful use of your words and imagery. a great poem. I loved the title. great chose. "i am the enchantress." That was my favorite line. an excellent poem from an excellet writer. well done cant wait to read more from you. keep them coming.
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We do paint pictures with our words- creating new worlds for others to share. Liked the flow and the message you share with others in this write.
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I am a fan of the extended comparison. I thought "All on my paper I *DO* paint" was interesting; it just stood out to me. The last four lines are my favorite, with the epithet "Enchantress" and "Painting the invisble to the mortal eyes." I think I would take "the" out, but great write!
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imagination/good
you have written about a world we all have...a world of imagination where the gatekeeper with the key is the person who imagines things.We are the masters of our own worlds.A poem well written and a poem which has the power to take the reader into the poet's world. -
Great
absolutely LOVE it
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WOW!!!!! How very true your words, of those of us that write!! We do paint with our words, and get to have fun doing that! What a great job you have done on this one! Best of luck in this contest!!!
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