Don’t ever talk to strangers
Beware the green cross code
Use safety belts
And prophylactics
Be good
And pay your taxes
Remember Nanny worries
Even though you’re twenty five
She wants to take such care of you
That you’ll need to take up
Binge drinking and unsafe sex
Drug related gun crime
Football violence
Or motor cycling
If you want to encounter
Life and death
So drink un-beer and un-coffee
Sweetened with un-sugar
With just a touch of un-cream
Behind five lever security locks
In a carefully double glazed
Cavity walled house
Gaze up at the ceiling
Where your forebears saw the stars
Author notes
I have been reading about the relationship between the ancients and the heavens.
This is a first draft, so suggestions and criticisms are requested
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I like it, it sorta sounds like my life. lol No but seriously, I like this piece. You can't exactly live if your protected all your life, you have to experience things for yourself. I think that is what I pulled out of this.
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Wow, could I go off on a rant...
You are speaking of one of my pet peaves; Distruction by best Affection. Or cripling by doing for a growing organism what it could and should do for itself. Children are going to test themselves with danger. And being so sheltered, they don't even know how to recognize it.
Then they grow up and overload a justice system that is based on people being able to consider another point of view and be reasonable. Now if somethng bad happens, find the responsible party, and sue... -
i didnt really like it. cant put my finger on why i didnt like it but i didnt.
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I like this, but I think it needs more, an I think it would be easy for you to find more, since the world is in such a bad place right now.I really liked where your going with this, everything you say in this write seems to be the way we should be liveing just to survive, but who would want to live this way? Let me know if you make changes. Keep up the great work. I have a suggestion for a line: "Erase all T.V. shows that does'nt express god,wear your freshly made armour suits just to go check the mail" this is just an idea written line.
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keep up the spelling
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I like it the way it is...un-precedented
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Un-couple our kids from the pleasures of the flesh - un-eat the pizza, un-digest the burger. Might we be more positive in spite of our worries? Just to let you know, I am at the head of the queue when the worries are being shared out!! xx aw fuck xx ps, tried to show them the stars.....
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