All alone,
I feel at home,
My mind, the place where I atone.
Blind to lies,
Fooled by smiles,
Left me frozen for a while.
Now you're gone,
I wasn't wrong,
I'll find a new place to belong.
After all that I endured,
I wont miss you anymore!
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Author notes
Shadedgrey- I wrote this after a bad end to a long term and very confusing relationship that left me with a lot to work through.
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Great
Short, very concise and to the point. You did a great job and I can definitely relate. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Night Mistress 1 -
It is always brave when people find the strength to write out their feelings. I hope writing this helped you work through some of the sad feelings at the end of the relationship. A very striking piece. Thank you for sharing it
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wow!!! this is pretty good!!! congratulations on the honarable mention!! you deserved it. anyway, my name's SLICK99 and i would like it if you commented on my poems. have a really nice day, -slick99
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Thank you for entering my contest
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Sounds like a breakup was a blessing in disguise! you shouldn't have to 'endure' anyone or anything, I am slowly learning this myself.
I liked how this finished, the hopeful line at the end.
This is a nice little poem, that almost goes full circle; from being heartbroken to seeing the light at the end of the tunnel.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Sunny
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Good write
If you cant be yourself around your friends and those you love then in time we find ourselves lost . Always be yourself for we are all we really have we can rely on truthfully and friends that will let you be this truthful person shall never let you down
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You tell them! Great work. Thanks for entering.
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i love this. i've been lucky enough to not have many bad break ups but every now and then it happens. i loved the lines
"Blind to lies,
Fooled by smiles,
Left me frozen for a while" -
I know this feeling ohh too well. I know what you are feeling, especially here:
Blind to lies,
Fooled by smiles,
Left me frozen for a while -
wow
wow that was amazing. Did it have a past....like how you came up with it? Blind to lies,
Fooled by smiles,
Left me frozen for a while.
Now you're gone,
I wasn't wrong,
I'll find a new place to belong
I feel as if i can relate to that part most of all
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WOW, Amazing!!!
powerful& emotional too
i love it all
Thnx for ur entry & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
this was a strong and emotional write which was moving
it was beautifully penned with emotion
i loved it well done -
Very very nice. Yes, they give us so much torture so why should be miss them once they leave! I like the emotion behind the poem and if only I could reach those final words in my own life. Thanks for entering
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You have written something short here, but at the same time you have captured a whole lot of feelings and emotions within your lines.
I truly like the strong message that you radiate within your words. Sometimes it can be so hard to love someone - especially if they don't love you back the way you love them - that it is better to get that person out of your life.
Keep it up!
Leander -
Love it
thats excatly how I feel right now.... my favorite part
Now your gone,
I wasn't wrong,
I'll find a new place to belong.
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Fantastic
great poem
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