Hello old friend.
It has been an eternity it seems
since I have heard anything from you.
I take it all has fallen to its end.
You have moved on with your life,
and left things behind.
I guess I can understand this.
We all need change.
We all evolve into something new.
Time rolls along on its never ending journey,
and things are buried in its wake.
New things are found as the old rots and fades away.
We grow and change into something that we must be.
Someone who can face the world with open eyes each day,
and not have to pretend to those around us.
And as much as I know this is the way that things work,
it still hurts.
Still leaves an empty hole, where sunshine and laughter once lay.
Where the gentle words of a caring friend,
took away the grey clouds that overshadowed life.
Even if it was just a temporary break in a storm cast world.
It was welcomed, cherished,
and now it is missed.
I hope your life is treating you well.
I hope the choice you have made is the right one for you.
I also hope that you too, have that special person.
One who can clear away your storms and bring you light.
I just hope they too, do not blow away
like a dead leaf in an autumn wind.
In a list
A contest entry
- You're Not Here Anymore by Annexed Josephine.
300 points, ended June 26, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i love love love this one. its so relatable. i find myself thinking this will happen in the near future. just knowing that friends sometimes leave us, no matter how much we cherish them.. it's sad but true. i wish they knew how much we wanted them to stay, but i also wish they are doing well in their new life.
this poem was very well expressed. exactly what i was looking for. thank you for sharing it.
good luck in the finals!
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I can relate with this poem because I've felt the same loss of a friend, particularly one recently. You have expressed this very poignantly and meaningfully!
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this is a great poem. i got to admit, this part of life really sucks! thanks for the entry
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Hood-Winked!
Another joy to read, though it speaks of the sadness felt when loosing a friend.
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Hoodwinked
Time can change people. Time changes itself. I have lot many friendships that could have developed. Some cended before they could start. -
Hoodwinked!
This is a powerful and meaningful write, clearly stated, keeping emotions in check but expressing yourself very so well. I like this one a lot.
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today!
Dennis :^)
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oops, forgot the applauds!
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Hoodwinked!
Love is something so true and bliss, yet is accompanied by pain when it ends. This is something very close to me, for I have lost friends whom I've cared about deeply. Thank you for sharing these words. I was deeply touched. Excellent work! -
Happens to us all, and sometimes only because life cascades down in a waterfall of "must do's" that intrude on what we wish we might be doing with our friends and family.
Should not be that way... but you write about it brilliantly. 
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Beautiful and sad. An interesting write and one that I am sure most people can relate to. To have a close friend that made your life seem brighter to slowly fade away like the sunset is a painful experience. You wish them only the best and try to move on with your life. I love how you moved from sadness in the beginning to trying to find hope at the end. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
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this piece has something we can all relate to...someone we once knew well has slowy faded from our lives as we continue on...i like the metaphors of storms and sunshine, they work well here. what i found most interesting is how the mixing of emotions in this piece. At the beginining there is sadness, but by the end there are tones of hope (trying to find the good in the bad, wishing her well)...but there are also despairing regretful tones (dead leaves, the rotting past). Its a great portrayal of the mixed emotions we feel in so many situations that are hard for us to handle. well done here.
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Thank you for the comment, I have changed it some, I hope this makes an improvement
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The punctuation is a bit inconsistent, and that makes odd to read...it tampers with the flow/meter...
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