With a thought, though thought is nigh
As we look up at the wondrous sky
Adventure takes us beyond the rail
And up high above the billowing sails
Towards the moon where the sun sets low
The waves begin to bring us in tow
With succession towards the stars
Our dreams are filled with our memoirs
Behold look down on our trip to the moon
Though it all may end quite soon
The sea, pale glistening like a jewel
Will forever be my tool
To the world above and the world below
Forever and ever, I will go.
A contest entry
- 20 Lines or Less - 20 Entries - Any Form- Prompt! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended July 1, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This flows oh-so well! It's like hang gliding. Wonderful imagery and sentiments. Sometimes it's nice to see all your options and be at peace there.
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Lovely and a little ambiguous -- I like the looking up and looking down, between two worlds, always a place for a poet, although sometimes not the easiest place to be... I really enjoyed reading this!
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This sounds like a wonderful adventure, a journey between lovers to somewhere no one can touch them where they can be free to just be. I love it. Or for that person with an intense omount of pressure in life that sometimes just wants to get away. You make me wanna go too. Can I go with you?
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Thanks for the memories............
whisper
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Nice
I mightgo tooo, Adventure and wonderous journey ahead. I loved it.
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Towards the moon where the sun sets low
The waves begin to bring us in tow
With succession towards the stars
Our dreams are filled with our memoirs
Great job! I enjoyed reading it. I like the flow and rhyme of it. Great job and I hope you keep writing!
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Very nicely written, excellent rhythm and rhyme and I love were you took the prompt. A finely woven tale, thanks for the great entry. Hugs, Bunny
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How lovely!
Very lovely words...kind of like a fairytale. I really liked it. Well written...
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