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My Weakness Hidden

He is in my thoughts ,
everyday i see his face.
I hear his voice, 
although, I can not reach him.


He's in the stars .
He's in the mirror.
He's in my dreams.
Yet, He can not reach me.


 I am in the reality's.
I am in the responsibility's
of life.


Hes perfect for me,
I feel He's a soul-mate.
There is almost no chance
to be together.


(Fate is cruel to us)


For now... I must be strong. 
My weakness be hidden .

The need has grown ,

the love is blossoming.

Pure as the whitest rose.

 

Here and now...
The only place we can be.

 

 Our dreams!

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  • Liquid memories
    June 30, 2007

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    sweet words

    your heart opens with feelings and caring, and shows in your writing. Dreams are wonderful places to be and enjoy, and at times the reality of my world, so keep those dreams, and enjoy.


  • BeautifulFlame
    June 29, 2007
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    lol maybe ...
    Thanks for reading this!


  • Aha
    June 29, 2007
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    u really in luv, girl.
    but not only in your dreams


  • Sesheta
    June 29, 2007

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    Some grammar mistakes, I do see. Capitilization, apostrophe usage, pluralization...please edit a bit.

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