I always knew,
love hurt.
But when,
and please respond,
did it ever begin like this?
Since when
could love hurt
and feel so good,
under the same rain?
So far away
but near my heart,
me and him
Telephones apart.
No connection,
no inflection,
Candy-hard words
whispered in my ears.
If he didn't love me back,
maybe,
it wouldn't hurt so bad.
Yet,
he loves me,
more than I
could ever Fathom.
I need to see him
because The hole he digs while away
Is Eating me up.
And I don't think
that I'll live to see that day
when he returns.
Author notes
i dunno it developed as it went. GAHHH SO MANY TYPOS!!! ok i think it's fixed!
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- The Pain That Love Brings by Sesheta.
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how sad...
this is very sad, and if you are truly going through this, i send my deepest sympathies...but this poem is truly heartfelt. good job and good luck!!
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Please re-read and edit your mistakes. There are only a few.
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hmmm if they're gramatical, you've no hope, for i am awful with grammar, and the spell checker says it's fit. But I'll see if i can find anything! thanks.
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An "I" is lower-cased, and other than that, all that I would change is some capitalization, but that's up to you. Thank you for going over things~
Isalie
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