Death by hot peanut butter in a needle,
You were willing to help me end my misery.
You were the most beautiful creature I had ever beheld, in that moment.
You were just enough cool and callous that I believed,
Beyond the realms of my own comprehension you understood me
A contest entry
- Words To Shatter A Smile by Exodus.
600 points, ended July 7, 2007, 37 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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you did a wonderfull job on this.....
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quite emotive!!! great job!
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"peanut butter' in a syringe, now that's a first for me. That alone got me in your corner. The repetition of "you were" kinda set me off balance but all in all the work, even in it's sad state, shines.
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This is amazing. I really loved the first line. Certainly unique and something that I wouldn't have thought of in a million years.
You have some amazing use of language in here and it does wonders for your piece. Thank you for this, the entire thing was completely enjoyable and one of the better pieces I have read
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Im glad you liked...though this was an actual conversation I had with someone lol..funny how truth is stranger than fiction..
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