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All Alone

The eyes stare at him in anger and painful rejection
He can't look at them no longer
The blood in my heart pusles faster and faster, which causes him to pass out
Aches and pains fill his mind up to the brim of screaming as he wakes from my minor coma
And watch everyone else look at him in disgust and He can't stand it any longer

HE tries and crawl away from them, agony shooting through my limbs
He cries out and ask, "WHY CAN'T I RELIVE THIS PAIN IN MY CHEST? I MUST BE OUT OF MY MIND!!"
He tries and carve out his own heart and manages, the gore and crimson pours over his clawed hand
He screams out loud again, curling up in a ball
Shaking and quivering with his heart safely in his hands
He goes with the laughs and hurtful ridicule of the people around him
His last thoughts of this place...they never loved him...

~End

Author notes

inspired by The used's "THE BIRD AND THE WORM"; also it speaks of my eternal fear of heartbreak and betrayl.

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  • Timespell
    January 4, 2008

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    Very good...

    I can see why you won Gold with this entry.
    It has a very errie feel about this one

    Well done,

    T.S~


  • serenity silvermoon
    July 20, 2007

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    this was very sad it spoke to me when i tryed to kill myself i thought none loved me but at that point in time my best friend who was my uncle had died and my dad, stepmom, and my sister always beat me and i was not aloud to see my mom for 4 years. i hope this is not a true story but if it is i am sorry. you are a great writer keep up the great work i hope we can be friends and allpoetry family thanks for sharing and god bless you forever and always sign a friend dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    July 15, 2007

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    I love the images you have created. I can feel the insanity and pain befor, and the final momment of relief when its all finally over. that one second of freedom befor the black. I will read more of your work.


  • dream5111
    July 14, 2007

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    "The blood in my heart pusles faster and faster, which causes him to pass out
    Aches and pains fill his mind up to the brim of screaming as he wakes from my minor coma
    And watch everyone else look at him in disgust and He can't stand it any longer" is my favorite part good luck