Shoot me in the heart
And pronouce me dead
Forget all the memories
And all the lies I said
Thoughts shall fade forever
As this hours wear down thin
Memories don’t last a lifetime
They end where they begin
Life is not worth living
So pierce your flesh with knives
Because in this world of love and hate
It’s impossible to survive
So shoot me in the heart now
Before I shoot myself down
When they find me dead there
Say that's how I was found
Life is not worth all the tears
And all the choices that we make
Shut up, tell the whole world
That every smile you do is fake
Shoot yourself in the heart
Before it pulses out of time
You know you want to do it
Pull that trigger one last time
F.uck this world we live in
Nothing good can come of it
So sit in your dark room now
With your scarred wrist slit
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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love love love
i absolutley love this poem dont kill urself please! -
omg that was AWESOME!!!!! u r so talented but please what ever u do dont kill your self
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AMAZING!!!
As I have said many time before. I can feel your words. I know the pain. You are an amazing poet. I love your work!!
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turn the gun around and that frown upside down....
Its funny cos i never would have read this poem has i not have followed the assholery from mr metaphor... heh... This poem is very deep but very negetive... take it from someone who hates humans so much i want "human hunting" to be legal and im 100% serious (but i like animals too).... Life is full of good things... i hope you dont really believe all this, i hope its just a poem expressing your darkest feelings because it took me until now to find something worth fighting and living for... but i do wish to say this poem is very well written and put together almost flawlessly... smile and relax...
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this poem is great. you use rhyme very well, which is not an easy task. just one mistake in the second line, pronounce, would be the correct spelling... any way i really enjoyed it, keep them coming.
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Very dark
A very dark poem indeed.
It is extremely well written and has very vivid imagery. The rhyming pattern and metre are superb.
There are a few small spelling mistakes - line 2 "pronouns" instead of "pronounce" and line 6 "wares" instead of "wears" - but they do not detract from the poem.
Dark and depressing and, from the sound of it - written by a desperately sad and pessimistic person. I pray you weren't writing from experience.
Life is always worth living - it's the only one we get. There is always love, there is always hope.
If you were writing from experience, I pray you find both.
Great poem! Deserves more than 3 applauds.
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This poem was amazing!!!! Im speachless... The flow was great and the rhyme scheme was awesome. The emotions felt in these words brings the reader to shock feeling the pain and anger that connects the reader to the author. Everything this poem represents and every meaning behind it and within it makes it such a heartfelt piece. You have a true talent and amazing writing skills!! Keep penning because your words matter!
PlZDieFasterLove
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Well wow thats about all I can say. this is good, you showed your emotion and I could feel it.
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F.uck this world we live in
Nothing good can come of it
So sit in your dark room now
With your scarred wrist slit
an intriguing write is here...a great piece touching the scenario of the life and its truths... ..Well what else can be the more deep than this verse when you talk about temporal status of love and its depth..I love this
piece..you have worded this poem
with so much wonder..I appreciate and I am at awe..well done.. -
Wow
This is a very deep poem and my writings are very much the same. But things change and I think you will be pleasently suprised to find that life is worth the tears because one only smiles on reflection of pain
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omg this is AMAZING.. i love it.. LOVE IT=].. i love the way you started this..and the way you ended it =] ahh i love this.. its sad, deep, amazing=]
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surprising...
was very taken with your use of humor in the middle of the poem - "say that's how I was found". Don't know if that was what you intended or not but giving instructions to someone on how to get away with shooting you I found as funny. Keep writing!
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There is a strong aura of sadness surrounding your words here. I think you have expressed yourself quite well. If I were to make any suggestions, it would merely be to run this through a spell checker.
Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use. 
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this is a very well expressed poem!!
you wrote with such honesty and brutality!!
very nice job!! i love the 2nd 2 last stanza
"Shoot yourself in the heart
Before it pulses out of time
You know you want to do it
Pull that trigger one last time"
this really speaks and I can hear the passion in the words!!! very nice write!!
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"And pronouns me dead" -- LOL, you mean "pronounce," not "pronouns."
It's an effective poem, but it's extremely cliched and that made me laugh even harder at it. -
This is a very emotionally effective poem. Although not in this place right now, I can relate to your words. Very expressive Well done dear poet.
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Wow i love it..
i haven't seen anything of yours in a while
i was starting to get worried
but it was worth the wait
this is amazing
one of the best i've read
it's just.. great.
keep it up
hope your doing well
<3Flo
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It flows very well, and the rhyming doesn't sound forced. The second stanza is my favorite. there's a powerful message in these words. Thank you for sharing, keep it up.
E~S
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