He loves his son so much he'd like to visit him,
but he lost contact ages ago and doesn't have the address.
He thought about calling him, yet even after sporadic attempts
on the house number at 5am, he's conveniently forgotten the mobile'
especially provided, so all messages he left were vicious, and
not suitable for twelve year olds. To the first and only born,
deleted for the swear-words mixed with threats.
Pity he doesn't remember when he's sober.
Author notes
clarity rules the kitchen sink
A contest entry
- Sarcasm by Edna Sweetlove.
850 points, ended July 6, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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People should take lessons in parenting before they start shagging each other. Just a thought. It would keep the birth rate dowm at least.
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Quite liked this - for personal reasons it struck a chord - nice write, interesting layout and style.
James
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Sounds like typical working class parenting to me.
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feed the baby!
"fuck off, I am smoking a fag"
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unfortunately this hits slightly close to home, haha... nevertheless an excellent poem. i think i saw earlier that the first stanza was for a quickie contest? i like the way you developed it into this full-length one. i can't remember what it's called, but i like the way you start or finish sentences in the middle of the line. great write.
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thanks! The 1st stanza was what I first submitted to this contest, then I added more. (I'll say that publically in case it's judged as a pre-write
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