I am handcuffed to your wishy washy heart
You have read me the Miranda rights,
The key is buried in your mind
I'm done with your rules, and the fights
My being, devoted to you forever
The stress is taking it's toll on me,
Numb to the pain that surrounds us
What has happened to our Holy Matrimony?
My thoughts are as demons that haunt me
Is it our love is just drifting away,
My future seems to be so bleak, unsure
It's all over the cruel words that you say
I want to leave, but I can't do it
Your love has brainwashed my soul,
My heart is as flat as a flitter
I'm losing all sight of our life's goal
The kid in my heart is fading
How much more can one mind think it's enough,
You promised through thick and thin
Our love would hold up when the going got tough.
Author notes
Ripley wouldn't even believe this one.
6/29/2007
poetdontknowit
A contest entry
- your inner personal thoughts by x Bright Eyes x.
700 points, ended July 22, 2007, 52 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - strong feelings by Violent Glass.
425 points, ended March 3, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Incredible. A very good description of this particular hell.
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LOVE SUCKS - then you break-up find LOVE again and sometimes it SUCKS sometimes it does not ! who knows? good write thanks for sharing the vaguearies of love regards zaj
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This is very powerful. Your words speak raw truth and presents you in a place of accomplishment. Great job.
Good luck in the contest
Soulful Woman
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verry good poem i enjoyed this flowed well
john
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sorry it took so long to get back to you but I took another look at this poem and I don't know if I was just not on top of things or you changed it. The First stanza is the best. If I were you I would get rid of wishy washy... just doesn't fit with the first stanza. Keep thinking out of the box. It is a very good poem though.
I enjoyed this poem. You have some fashionable ideas and although one stanza sticks out it moves relatively smoothly. I think the thing you should work on is not being just another "cliché'". What I am saying- write things that are out of the box, absurd, and all the while the same message is given. Eh?
Liked it and keep writing
AtiVan
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good job
This tends to show the youthful innocence and the changing in what can only be adult curiousity and suspicions, that is a part growing up process which is sad to see lost. Not only when the going got tough, but you got tough knowing what to do to survive.
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i love the flow and rhyming scheme of this. I love the words like washy and holy matromony vey cute. THe level of write here ithought would be as a bable as some rhyme poems are but this was complex somewhere
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Hopelessly devoted to you !!!
Oh my! This is so sad and heartbroken. I almost can't get through it! I feel so sorry for anyone that has to go through this. I've been here a few times. I would give this person a big hug if I could.
Thanks,
RedSnow
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Awww,this is so sad but speaks the truth that this happens to people out there and thanks for the read.
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sad
It's a truth for several couples out in the world. Usually women, but i believe it happens to men too. being totally discarded and abused. U relly pinned the deep inside emotions, and great flow.
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Flat as a flitter
Love that! It so well describes the 11 year marriage that I just got out of.
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well I think that you are writing what alot of people are living. I think that the you have written with much feeling and I believe it flows well
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Subject matter aside, disappointed heart,The darkness that surrounded the piece was felt.Disoloution is a wide field to cover in a write.Good work.
LOWELL POE
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DEEPLY HEART-TOUCHING
Sadly this is happening to so many of us
I was one who decided to leave and the leaving was so hard but now I feel it was the best thing for me.
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