I have decided to take a trip
To a far away land
A place of wonder and beauty
Never bland.
A place above the clouds
A place above the skies
This place called heaven
Free of fear and cries.
I chose this place
It was time for me to rest
I hope the people down below
Will know it was for the best.
I was unhappy down there
I was sick with a terrible kind of flu
God told me that it was time
To say goodbye to everyone I knew.
It’s nice up here
Very beautiful filled with health and good
“Mommy and daddy we will meet again”
Just as we always would.
But until that time comes
I will watch over you
I will guide you mommy and daddy
I will wait up here for you two.
I had to depart from this world
I am sorry I left you behind
But you have to remember, “God loves children”
And angels are hard to find.
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Written August 17th, 2003
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ooooooh my gosh...this was so beautiful! I cried...were you inspired to write this because of an experience? Or was it something that just came to you? Wonderful ujob, either way! Thanks for sharing
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THanks for the comments on my stories. I really like this poem! It's really sad, but sweet too. You're a really good writer, I'm glad I read this.
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:-( This is so sad! You used yours words so beautifully! Thank you so much for sharing this piece of work! It helps those who are struggling with a lose or a future one!
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Nicely written! I liked the way you wrote it taling about hope and no despair! having faith that there is a new, warm and beautiful place waiting for us.
I really enjoyed it!
Mari
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Oh my God this was so sad
but so increadable beautiful. The emotion and words of this poem are just absolutly amazing. For the age you are this was so well written and just wow! I look foreward to reading more of your work.
Lena
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Wow, that's really beautiful! I know that sounds sappy, but it does. It really invokes strong emotions in me. I almost cried! Great poem!
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children it seems, are better at understanding then we gi' them credit for. also, they seem to so oft' be the ones that are old and wise, as reasureing, or explaining to us older. they seem to know, what is and what will be. i think that they are truly angels here for us, and closer to heaven for it.
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Very very beautiful, another lovely write ^_^
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good
Very nice work, Very deep, sad and much with the emotions.
Ps, thanks for your comment on my poem
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wonderfully written and so heart felt, i loved it!
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This was very touching....especially for those of us who have lost young loved ones.
That trip that was decided for the young girl to take can only be a wonderful one.
Great write...keep writing....you will change as you grow when you feel it in your poets soul....you did great. Your words were great!!!!!
Sam
Sam
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very touching and sensitive piece , very well written , keep penning your lovely words,... also Thank You for kind words left on my write, was very kind, keep penning JP *s*
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awww ths was very sweet and emotion filled peice very well written! Keep up the good work, you haven't written much (well posted it) but from what i have you are very good...keep it up!
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This is a beautiful poem. It brings forth a more hopeful look at death and we dont really see it that often. So thanks for sharing. Great write.
Beth -
Suicide is not the answer. It only causes more questions and problems for the loved ones left behind. I hope you noticed the date I wrote the poem, A Lonely Walk. Death is a permanent decision and I hope you realize that. There is so much to live for. Count your many blessings. Thanks for your comments on my poem, A Lonely Walk. Take care Rick
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Beautiful yet sad. Well written.
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i loved it, especially the ending,
I had to depart from this world
I am sorry I left you behind
But you have to remember, “God loves children”
And angels are hard to find.
beautiful, theres nothing else to say but beautiful -
Simply beautiful
a real joy to read something so nice 
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Great poem here...keep up the good work!
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Have you ever read the book "The Lovely Bones" by Alice Sebold? Well this poem reminded me of that story indeed....seems this could have been included as a preface to it. Reading this gave me the chills the book did
You captured the death of a child in such a different way~~ and you did a wonderful job doing so~~ great work
~~Dawn
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wow, i loved the ending of this one, the whole of the last stanza was juse great, left you with a good feeling rather than the usual feeling of sadness at writes like this, great write! x
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Well I've read most of your pieces, very nice! the emotion in all of them are very strong and heartfelt! Although the writing tech brings your poems down from their full potential. One that that might help with that would be matching syllables in the lines...
I have decided to take a trip
To a far away land
A place of wonder and beauty
Never bland.
Could change to
I've longed to take a trip
To a far away land
A place so wonderous
With beauty, never bland
Makes it flow better and easier to read, just a suggestion.
anyways other then that your a very talented writer. and keep up the great pieces of work!!
PS, thank you for your comment on "A Crippled Rose" and my favorite of yours is "Bed of Sorrows" hehehe -
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First off, MrPink gives this a 10E "weeeeeeeeee" for bringing a tear to my eye! Damn leaky eye socket! This poem is perfect in every way, it has excellent word useage, transitioning, rhyme and flow. But most importantly it has the ability to make me feel what I was reading, which is my favorie criteria in a poem or story. This is beautifully written and told, thank you! I also relate persoally which makes this even better!!! Please write more!!! Oh, and thank you for the comment! -
VERY well done! ~~~Val
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i like this poem a lot....it brings back memories....thanx...keep it up...
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I really liked this, had an innocent childlike quality to it, and i have to agree with the above posters, the line "angels are hard to find" to end it with is very good.
Thanks for reading one of mine.
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Holy CRAP!! This piece is so touching. Yes, brought tears to mine as well, aww, you put so much feeling and emotion into this it was overpowering. In a good sense, ofcourse. You're a wonderful writer with sum serious skills dude, keep it up. Please!! lol.
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Poems like this bring such hope to me, but also tears to my eyes...When I began I thought that this was just another average poem, but as I kept reading the emotion and the soul of the poem really began to attack me (the reader) and by the end I was just in a state of EPIPHANY!!! You really did a marvelous job with this...
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This has a simplistic beauty.
"...My father he was calling
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FANTASTIC. This one (holding my head down & muttering) made me tear-up. Yup. I love the ryhme (smooth in most places) and I loved the end, "angels are hard to find". Great write, absolutely adorable, I hope no one you knew was sent to heaven, but sadly I think it was someone you knew.
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"And angels are hard to find." love that line. This is a great poem one again however its very sad you put a very good impresion that it was writen by a small child and thats what makes it so sad. over all its awsome great write
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Johnathan
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Aaaaw...this was very sad, but also beautiful at the same time. I really enjoyed reading this...the rhyming was well done and the whole idea really is beautiful.
Keep up the excellent work!
always searching
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Amazing. Wonderful. Wow... Dontknow what else to say. great write. keep it up!
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i really liked this poem. i just wrtoe one about my sick aunt and how she thought it was her time to go up above the clouds. mine isnt as spritual as this but i see simularities. i like the style of this poem very much and may you be blessed with futher writing talents (aka no writers block- i hate that.)
bye~ madame rachae1
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