hold me tight [and never let go]
it feels so good when you hold me so
kiss me beneath the starry sky
forget about the rest of the world,let them pass us by
look into your eyes
what I feel is no surprise
my heart melts when I'm with you
I wish I know if you felt the same way too
Author notes
6/26/07 (day I wrote the poem)
A contest entry
- Can you say Cliche' ? by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 14, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything by My Darkness.
450 points, ended July 8, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
wow, yes run the other way, if this is what a guy expresses to you. You got it down pat. Not only is it a cliche poem, but it reveals the shallowness of cliche people who will turn out to be traitors. Good job. I liked it. Thanks for entering.
-
this is beautiful, however you are missing grammar/punctuation, which takes away from this... thanks for entering and good luck to you!
-
haha I just saw the comments written~ you should write back ~ then it's perfect! ....
-
Now this is like it! Nice job! it's the perfect write! Thanks so much for entering~ I am merely the host~ the judge will be viewing them late~ good luck to you~
-
Ahhh, this is so cute...
but it's kind of cliche
but, hey, don't be discouraged -
So thoughtful....
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
