The World’s Best Artists
I did not like you caterpillared
Cocooned to me was no big deal
But now your wings are spreading outwards
The Artist in you I can see
On bitty legs you ventured forward
You fed upon the rainbowed leaves
So a color when you called it
Would be there for you to be
Then enshawled you meditated
On design and blend and mix
And in your room you painted painted
Your canvassed wings - flawlessly
In my garden on my flowers
In vast exhibits now I see
Masterpieces of perfection
And all that art might ever be
Author notes
A contest entry
- Butterflies & Waterlilies by liquidmindforever.
300 points, ended October 10, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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800 points, ended January 31, 2008, 138 entries
Honorable mention
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900 points, ended April 17, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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1500 points, ended March 27, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
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1250 points, ended July 14, 2008, 4 entries
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300 points, ended July 1, 2008, 19 entries
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360 points, ended September 27, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
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300 points, ended October 17, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 12 entries
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400 points, ended November 1, 2008, 8 entries
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1200 points, ended March 25, 5 entries
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400 points, ended September 30, 16 entries
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665 points, ended November 14, 42 entries
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Comments
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This is a nice piece. I love butterflies and you described their beauty well. Nice length. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This was a really good poem. So powerful! Thank you for the entry and good luck!!
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I'll tell you who would love this. Dr Dan Danahar and Mrs Libbi Danahar. Maybe their son as well. Truely amazing work, you do butterflies justice. You also made me remove my cucoon and read something new! LOL sorry I had to make that joke, forgive me.
Best of luck in my contest and concrats on winning so many times with it
thankies for entering
Dryad Enya -
That's really good.
Love the imagery and the detail. Blessings in the contest.
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hey k
Kool poem =), very nice and wonderful k.
thanks for entering my contest k. byyyyyyyyye k -
77coments and numerous trophies says it all!
*clap*
Beautiful in every way imaginable, simple plain and worth every second and pain put into it. You are a true poet. If anything I want to challenge you to make another one, harder but I wont because i'm tiered and want to go to bed!
Best of luck in the contest!
Gorecki -
Beautiful poem
Thanks so much for sharing
Best of luck to you -
This one is awarded!
Congrats on all the trophies! Great Write! Good Luck! -
beautiful and delicate good luck.*
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Beautiful write. The wording in this is great, and loved the imagery. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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awe beautiful.
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oh, this is beautiful as the beautiful is!
thank you for sharing!
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Wonderful!
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My favorite thing in this poem was your unique use of diction. Thank you so much for entering my contest!
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I love butterflies
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Sweet and stunning, marvelous work. I really enjoyed the story in it, telling of how the caterpillar became a butterfly and the butterfly became an artist. Wonderful. Thank you for your fantastic entry, and keep up the good work!
~Cj
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It's so pretty
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In my garden on my flowers
In vast exhibits now I see
Masterpieces of perfection
And all that art might ever be
Great write & great take on the prompt! Thanks for entering -
very pretty good luck
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a good poem but i should have mentioned that if its won more than three trophies it will be removed because its not fair on rising poets
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nice imagery here.
this poem had subtle beauty to be admired.
thanks for this entry and best of luck
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not exactly what I wanted but it is beautiful. I wanted poems about how emotions are translated into color ... you know, dark for grief, green for jealousy, etc. and how those weave in and out of our lives. Anyway the poetry itself is beautiful. Congrats on all the trophies.
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MMM INTRESTING, COMMING OUT OF THE MASK I LIKE THIS BEST OF LUCK
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Beautiful writing here! your image of a "new artist" is divine and lovely. your words are perfect and so very sweet. all your trophies are much deserved! a great piece! well done, thanks so much for entering the contest!
Chin up,
Summer Moon xx -
Wow, wow, wow, look at all your wonderful wins with this wonderful piece. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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This is darling. Thank you for entering.
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Great way of voicing the beauty of butterflies. I like how you put in your changed perceptions after you had seen them as butterflies...how at first you paid no ateention to the process, but when you saw the result it makes sense. Could be a metaphor for life actually.
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lotsa trophies and good write yay read the rules -
Wonderful Tribute
Oh such an artistic way to think about one of the most beautiful creatures in our world! Their masterpieces are just so lovely to look at. And what meadow would be complete without butterflies?? You are the first to mention 'The World's Best Artists' and believe you 100%. Thanks, poet for your submission. Keep on writing!
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Very nice an enjoyable read
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Well done poet! Unique take on the prompt. THanks for entering and best wishes,
Frogz~ -
I like the unique way this was created with its intent and meaning May an artist of any kind continue to have the wings to fly.
Thanks for joining in,
Warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
I agree
To the world's best artists beauty just comes naturally...
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Enjoyed this poem, very much. You seemed to gain inspiration from the picture too, which was fine. Thanks for the entry, and best in the contest!
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interesting i like this. its very well written. and very cute. my favorite part was when you said "With new legs you ventured forward
You fed upon the rainbowed leaves
So a color when you called it
Would be there for you to be
Then enshawled you meditated
On design and blend and mix
And in your room you painted painted
Your canvassed wings - flawlessly" thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
I have read like 3 of your poems so far, you just seem to have a magnet for trophies and a pen for winning poems.
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_Yes_ Creativity / Originality
_Yes_ Imagery
_Yes_ Metaphor
_Yes_ Emotion
_Yes_ Reaction
_Yes_ Relatability
_Yes_ Fluency
_Yes_ Powerful Beginning
_No_ Powerful Middle
_Yes_ Powerful Ending
_Yes_ Connecting Ideas
_Yes_ Interesting Idea Behind Piece and/or a Message Behind Piece
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I loved the metaphor of this poem
Beautiful imagery too.
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A very descriptive piece nice use of the colors.
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A very nice and descriptive read Quite colourful imagerey ...thankyou for entering and good luck
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Love the imagery on this one. The first line is my favorite.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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Contest: Picture Prompt: "I am NOT green and purple!" - so you say! by JP.Troy
Where to start! The first stanza I found slightly clumsy but the following 3 just blew me away completely!
With new legs you ventured forward
You fed upon the rainbowed leaves
So a color when you called it
Would be there for you to be
This is such an original way of describing the way an artist drinks in colours from the outside world and filters them through their eyes, their heart, their soul until the colour which appears on the canvas is longer just a colour. It is memories and experience and emotion and so much more. It is the artist.
Then enshawled you meditated
On design and blend and mix
And in your room you painted painted
Your canvassed wings - flawlessly
You have really capture the artist's contemplation of perfection. Something artists are so often criticised for... being perfectionists. I am glad that you have not criticised this or made fun of it, but rather shown the internal journey of the artist through this process.
In my garden on my flowers
In vast exhibits now I see
Masterpieces of perfection
And all that art might ever be
This stanza takes me back to when I discovered art, looking at the beautiful worlds hung on gallery walls. Those images, though they may long ago have been moved into storage in a garage basement, are still bright in my heart. They showed me all that art, and I, could be.
In this poem you have proved yourself not just a writer, but a true artist capable of painting the whole, glorious picture.
But now your wings are spreading outwards
The Artist in you I can see
Thank you for entering this contest. Good luck.
J.P. Troy
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Judging on the scale below:
1. Passionate write-------------------6/6
2. Visualization ---------------------6/6
3. Grammar & Spelling ----------------4/5
I gave you 4/5 as in stanza 3, line 3 the word 'painted' was repeated and I did not see the reason for it?
4. Interesting & Convincing ----------2/4
I could not really grade you on this for you were not trying to convince me anything.
5. Follows the Rules -----------------4/4
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TOTAL POINTS AVAILABLE --------------22/25
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Fantastic!!!!
'In my garden on my flowers
In vast exhibits now I see
Masterpieces of perfection
And all that art might ever be'
Good luck in the contest -
Your passion and visualization are excellent. Thank you for entering our contest.
Blessed Be~
)O(
DragonBlue
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oh wow simply amazing thank you for entering
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Great poem!
Good luck
-Raging Chaos -
I really like this. I can understand how you won so many awards... because it is a really good piece of work. I liked how your words painted a picture in my head... and although this was a prewrite I can see how you thought it would fit for this pirticular picture.
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Oh, I love this! It flows so beautifully...and the content of the poem is so remarkable.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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I love this - tis beautiful and flows well. The mind creates the imagery in the head and gives this piece that extra love needed.
Thanks for entering,
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I was kind-of hoping you would use both sides of the picture, because as far as I can see (which isn't very far) you only used the top half. either which way, nice job, you painted a beautiful image in my cloudy mind, and I applaud you for making me pick up ad dictionary once again.
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Hi,
Thank you for submitting this wonderful piece.....All week long, I have been busting chops over punctuation......Now I have (no pun intended) this “work of art” to use, as an example, of how to write a poem without it.....
Your subject is perfect, and flawlessly portrayed.......Each line is another brush stroke, in this not so still, life....There is a progression that unfolds beautifully. It is a delight to read.....I have one question.....In the third line, of the fourth stanza, it ends: “painted painted”...at this very moment, my grammar check is telling me, that, that is irregular. It would make for a better flow, if you put the second “painted”, at the beginning of the fourth line.....otherwise I am in awe......TTFN Love Laurel
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Welcome to my contest! The language was a simple yet moving. Good choice of metaphor. It seems to be about an artist that became someone to take your breath away with their skill. It sounds more personal though, possibly a son or daughter who grew up into someone amazing. I think this is wonderful. My only comment which you may take or ditch would be to not capitalize the first letter of every new line as it doesn’t give a smooth continuity to your sentences that seem to be continuous. I think some punctuation may also benefit, even if once at the end to show a finished conclusion of this person. Just a thought. Nice piece here.
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great piece congratulations on the trophy and i wish you the best of luck in this contest keep up the great work great imagery as well in this
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Thank you once again for sharing this beautiful poem with all of us here. You've created a work of majestic
art.
love,light,peace
liquid -
Re-reading the poems for judging purposes.
This poem is a beautiful work of art. I can hear
this from the POV of a tree upon which the crysallis
hung, and the caterpillar which ate of the leaves from the tree; I can see it from the POV of a child's
garden, or from a Deity's POV.
This is lovely and making GOLD a difficult choice.
Either way this is a winning piece.
Thank you so much for sharing your gifts with all of us.
lovelightpeace
liquid
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Thank you for entering BUtterflies and Waterlilies.
Nice poem.
love light peace and butterflies in your garden and all around
liquid -
You paint a good picture of an aspiring Artist.
A very well written piece.
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So Beautiful
Oh, I loved this piece! It was beautifully written and originality definately shines through. Before reading this, I presumed by the title that it was going to be about an actual artist, poet, painter or such. But instead, it was totally different that what I expected it to be. I loved these lines best "I did not like you caterpillared
Cocooned to me was no big deal
But now your wings are spreading outwards
The Artist in you I can see" It really catches my attention and flows perfectly from that point on. Wonderful poem! Best of luck in my contest & thanks for entering
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Beautiful imagery, loved it all. Such and inspiring poem! Good luck in the contest!
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This is a wonderful piece you have here.... well written
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
I love the way it's like an ode to a butterfly, but I suspect it's a little more than that!!!
Beautifully expressed!
Thank you for entering
Mari
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Wow. This is beautifully written, congratulations. I love how you treat the butterflies wings as if their canvasses, designed solely by the buterfly - it's so sweet, and easy to imagine. Good Luck in all your contests.
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Yes, I have to agree with Tiffany, that is a great opening line. You have some very good imagery throughout the poem, but the final stanza left me feeling down for some reason. I'm not sure why. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I am not a fan of rhyme, by any stretch. I read the first line in the preview and I had to read the rest.
"I did not like you caterpillared" has got to be one of the best opening lines for a poem I've *ever* read.
I was disappointed by the direction the rest of the poem took. I thought, I dunno. I'm not going to critique this, I'm going to bookmark it and come back to it in a different frame of mind and see how it reads then.
Again, though, brilliant opening line. For that, I applaud!
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hi danna
I cannot imagine, but would certainly appreciate you telling me, why you didn't "get" a lift on the last line. It ties the whole poem together because it states that butterflies are each a uniquely magnificent work of art as each line of a treasured poem is, or the butterflies on its flowers to a garden are.
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