The sun was rising
To begin the new day
But it had a dark feel
Death was following too
He stood proud and tall
Watching the rays of light
Filter through the dark
Somehow he senses the future
Today he would fight the
Last and final battle and
It would not end well for him
But he had accepted his fate
He gathered his men
Readied them for battle
Hoping that they'd live
Through the gruesomeness
Fate was against them
They fought valiantly
But Evil was much stronger
Death found almost everyone
He had survived the fight
Just barely hanging to life
They brought a priest to him
For his last rites and confession
He thought about his life
And all that he had seen
Everything he's been through
And the things he regretted
He saw the love of few
The hatred of many
The gaiety of court life
The hardship of manor life
He saw through people's souls
And the emotions they hid
The buried secret ambitions
The wishful dreams of power
He turned his thoughts to
His life and what had occured
Believing that he had accomplished
Almost everything he had wished to
There were the memories
Of the many battles fought
Gathering the spoils of war
Celebrating all the victories
But inside he felt empty
Even in spite of his achievements
Realizing that he missed
Something important in life
He didn't have much time
Left in his mortal life
And that's when he figured out
What he was missing
It the future of his soul
The looming of the after life
Would there be one for the
Might knight in shining armor?
He had to ponder the condition
Of his spiritual life
Did he have enough to say
He could go to heaven and be content?
It bothered him, deep inside
So he prayed long and hard
Repenting of the sins he'd commited
As well as the deaths he'd caused
So in the end, the priest
Could truthfully say to those
Who wished to know about
The legendary knight's death
That he had been repentant
Of the horror he had caused
And the suffering of the families
Who had lost someone dear
He wished that he could change
Everything that he had done
But he wanted to be remembered
For the good things he did
On his tombstone, it was written:
Here lies the legendary knight
Who did not wish death upon others
But had to follow the wishes of others
A model of bravery and loyalty
He will be forever honored here
Rest in peace
Author notes
I don't know if I really like the ending, but I got a writing block...
A contest entry
- Final Stand by DeadofKnight.
525 points, ended July 14, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Should I change the ending?
Comments
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To be honest, the ending can be improved a bit. Maybe changing it to something like this:
Here lies the legendary Knight
Who did not wish death upon others
But only followed Fate's desires
A model of bravery and loyalty
Who loved life with a passion
Very few have known
He will be forever honored here
Still, your entry was wonderfully done. Good luck in the contest.

