Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Nectar of Love

 Nectar of Love

 

An indescribable pleasure
The constant love I have for you
Mystical bond, beyond measure
A feeling of life felt by two

The constant love I have for you
The way you make me feel so fresh
Suckle my breast the way you do
As I caress your silky flesh

Mystical bond, beyond measure
Pressing you close upon my breast
I give to you; my sweet nectar
Together, we have both been blessed

A feeling of life felt by two
For you are my loving treasure
For nine long months I carried you
An indescribable pleasure

 

 

 

Author notes

Retourne
Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.
form source: shadowpoetry.com

In a list

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 18 of 18

  • Titus gold member
    August 22, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    Superdelicious!!!

    Having searched for poetry which really gets to grips with the heart, here is a fathomable reality, supercharged with ambition as this piece sets. A standard that goes beyond the superficial and leads us on to beautful platform to treasure. Now, I have a yardstick to build on!!


  • Swtpoetryman
    July 23, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    A FINE PIECE, INDEED!

    A beautiful piece written for a child as only a loving mother could write it from the very depths of her heart and soul! I enjoyed the sentiments and the emotions in this wonderful piece!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • Swan song gold member
    July 10, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Yes! I love this it is so very beautiful I love the devotion and I get a great visual on the sucking of the breast part. Well written indeed


  • maa gold member
    July 3, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    a very devotional poem of love, surrender and gratitude ... gracefully, you guide us to meet the one who is your Beloved - not a distant-seeming God - but a living incarnation of God's Love throuth a little innocent baby ...
    the sensuality suggested through your imagery reflects an aspect that further appeals to the sensation of mystical union that might be comparable to the union of two lovers ... (that's probably the closest most humans get in a life) ...

    a very original approach of the subject, thank you so much for your precious participation ...


    maa


  • PerVirtuous
    July 1, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This is one of the top two poems I have read in a month. I am in absolute awe of the scope of feeling you put into this, and the delivery was incredible. I could go on and on about this. I wish I could give it more than 3 bunnies.


  • Denierim
    July 1, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This is a beautiful poem, definately one of the best ones I've read for a while now. The bond between a mother and a child is special, that's proven by the past of times and I love the way you put that reality into these beautiful words. Thanks for sharing it, I like this one a lot!


    • Amera gold member
      July 1, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      Thank you for your kind comment and the applause.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 30, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Definitely felt by this mother, the indescribable at most times, bond that a mom shares with her child, you HAVE captured it beautifully..."Mystical bond, beyond measure" That line to me says it all..well done, healer of many babies, you have exceeded the feeling...with your words...


    • Amera gold member
      June 30, 2007
      Edit | Reply

      Julez

      Thanks so much. Your comment means so much. As a mom, I consider you to be an expert.


  • PoetsAngel
    June 30, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Lovely... you have captured the feeling of being a new Mother perfectly, it took me back to memories of my own babies...just beautiful Good luck in the contest

    Cathy


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    What can I say...You leave me speechless with this one my dear...A beautiful form and a great piece.
    Love reading your work...My muse has been on vacation lately. Love you
    Soulful Woman


  • Desire gold member
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    Oy!!

    Beautiful verse You have penned my Friend
    in a Magnificent form
    -Form Queen-
    Never tried this one yet
    but will eventually
    Love the message You have brought forth-
    bond between mother and child

    Thank You for sharing this!
    Best wishes to You in the contest busy bee
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • RedAquarius
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Sweet, sweet, sweet! So full of love and warmth. I particularly liked "you make me feel so fresh" - so much in that simple line. Wonderful words, dear friend!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Amera,

    Oh, this was absolutly excellent! I even like this more than your Tiger poem, this was just excellent cubbie, truly, it gets bookmarked!



    Dad


  • Laura
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    this is wonderful utterly beautiful infact i totally love it xxx xxx


  • Cant-touch-this
    June 29, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This is just the sweetiest: For nine long months I carried you an indescribable pleasure thank you so much for being you, you are a gem

1 - 18 of 18