im here again and i cant wait to get started
just the smell of the room gives me a rush
as i sit waiting in sweet anticipation of what is to come
he moves around getting every thing ready
as if to reassure he asks me if this is what really i want
and almost in song i say yes
with the sound of the needle
a shiver runs down my spine
another for my collection
some say i have too many
but i will never have enough
as he put the needle too my skin i purrr
such a sweet sensation
no pain of the body
no pain of the mind
just another tattoo to help me unwind
Author notes
i am hoplessly addicted to Tattos and Piercings
A contest entry
- 19 to 25 enter your best prewrites Judged by RedwingSpirit.
850 points, ended January 17, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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great poem, well done thanks for the entry my favourite line is "just another tattoo to help me unwind"
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I have a few but I never liked the pain. I did however cause my dad pain too lol he was so mad when he saw them. Excellent write.
Thank you for taking the time to enter this poem into my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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wow. That's weird. I'm sooo afraid of getting a tatoo, and you love it. Weird.
I really like this piece, the only thing that I would edit would be to add some full stops. That would make it better I think. -
I love this. In fact I just got back from getting another piercing . I love them soooo much and I know what you mean. Wonderful job, your descriptions are great.
~Steph~
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i like this. its not what i was expecting at first! lol. but its a great write and i like it. when i first started reading i though it would be something else completely. *laughs* thats what one gets for assuming... lol
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really i did think it was something else that needle was supposed for...but that twist...i really loved that!!.....an excellent write...kinda funny...hehe.....tc,adios!
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Wow...loved the twist right at the end...I'm sure everyone who's read this thought it was something else...well done!
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oh....at first i thought that it was about something else. i love the way that you put this. it great. thank you for your words and keep writing.
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Awesome!
im here again and i cant wait to get started
just the smell of the room gives me a rush
as i sit waiting in sweet anticipation of what is to come
he moves around getting every thing ready
as if to reassure he asks me if this is what really i want
This is awesome!
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this was badass! I loved it!
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Wow that was a suprise at the end with the tattoo.Lolz that was kind of unexpected but anyways I loved it.Good job.
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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I wasn't really expecting that either. Though it relived me when at first glance of a few lines I thought you were mixing sex with cutting. Oh my, but then the twist. Good write. I know a lot of people who are addicted too. all I got is my nose pierced. and ears duh.
Fine poem,
Creatress
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Haha wasn't expecting that
Nice one- very cute 
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yeah for a couple of thoughts/seconds i thought this was a druggie or something fucked up
haha tatoos are awesome
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Hahahaha
As I was reading this I must admit I was expecting a heroin usage poem. I to have a Tat. Got it when it wasn't cool. The same goes for my ear piercing. But I am among the few who can stop. at ONE! Great poem & good luck -
someone else that loves bodyart great
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Good Twist
Hahaha. You did a good job of tricking me into thinking the poem was about something else. Some of the earlier lines in the poem make more sense after I have gotten to the end, such as: "Another for my collection/Some say I have too many."
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