Only for you
Will I leave this world forever.
Only for you
Will I never speak to you again.
I can't lie myself any more
Saying that someday you might love me.
Don't think I could stand
To see you with him.
I can't hold you
The way he does.
Nor can I kiss you
For your lips belong to him.
I can't pretend to just be your friend,
I can't only be your girl friend.
So only for you
Will I give you up.
I hope he makes you happy.
Author notes
Tell me what you think...And yes this has happend to me.
A contest entry
- passion and desire. by patsoldcat.
750 points, ended July 6, 2007, 8 entries
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this poem is...i cant describehow much this one touches me. ive gone threw this before more than once too. its just magnificant. its beautiful.
I can't lie myself any more
Saying that someday you might love me.
Don't think I could stand
To see you with him.
I can't hold you
The way he does.
Nor can I kiss you
For your lips belong to him.
i love this part.
your a very good writer.
good job!
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wow
I know kinda how you feel, my best friend is goin out with my ex and its hard
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man i gotta say i really connected with this pice cuz i have felt tat way as well. I wish the best of luck to you.
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final edit
this saddens me that you were given the place of such lonliness, and rejection.
often one must choose the love that the heart seeks and often another is left behind. with much love still to give,
i do hope you did find love and all is well in your life.
a most emotional and wonderful write.
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Sad, and very deep. Show's the feelings well, but not so thorough that there's no curiosity about it. Great write.
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omg! i love it! it's beautiful. it happened to me too.. it hurts so much i know. ;-;
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Very nice write, but sorry to know that this happened to u, u know life's full of ups & downs...
I like this poem much ..
Thnx for sharing
GloriousGift
Heba
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Very deep. But oh.so.sad.. Sorry this happened to you.
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sad
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This is very nice and very deep.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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very deep and sad i'm sorry this happened to you dear! Good luck!
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thank you
blessings and luck.
that this happened is so sad, it makes me tear, i am glad though you are here t tell of this. -
it's good...but what i dont understand is these lines:
Only for you
Will I never speak to you again
Nor can I kiss you
For your lips belong to him
well...it's jz those lines,confuses me...um...overall,was filled with raw emotion...simple yet deep...really straightfoward,and descriptive...i could feel the persona's sadness and anger toward the lover...i'm so sorry this happen to you...
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Wow, that is incredibly harsh. Im really sorry. You did a good job of expressing what was certainly a very strange time in your life.
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