I've loved you for so long
Needing you for the confidence to be strong
I stood beside you while hiding in the dark
Only a matter of time, until I fell apart
Then I cried to you, pouring out my heart
And there is no way to describe
The emptiness I felt inside
When you enjoyed my company
This is my last...last poem
All the inspiration simply drifted away
Like me from my sanity, each and every day
Oh and how I wish that there where a way
I was just good enough for you to stay
The only one able to help me
Feel good about myself
Taught me how to love
Pieces of my soul
But this is my last...last poem
The last piece ever written by me
Inspired by you, your beauty
Cause you don't deserve my tears
Not afraid of the truth anymore
Won't live like that ever again
Hoping you'll open up to me
Writing eloquent poem after poem
While waiting by the phone
Now that you're gone
Now that I am free
The words no longer come to me
I've known you most of my life
And love you, more than you know
Maybe I should shut up and smile
Because you are my friend
But I just can't help not to cry
When that's all we'll ever be
And this is my last...last poem
Author notes
Option #6
A contest entry
- Inspire me by Moon Raven.
450 points, ended June 30, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You have so much power in you. I feel it steaming from the screen of my computer as I read your poem. I am seriously taking away by this piece. Is it truly your last poem ? Because you would be doing the world a serious dis-service by never writing a poem again. I think you should continue forever-especially if they are going to be this brilliant.
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So I wasn't sure if I commented on this, but then I looked and saw that I did, but I'm going to comment again anyway... I actually had my eyes tear up reading this because I actually felt the emotion of the write... I don't think that I did the first time I read it... it's very powerful, and sad and heart wrenching but you expressed it in this beautiful way that signals an ending, but at the same time a deep sadness for the ending. if that makes sense. Its just very relatable and inspiring!
I think my favorite part definitely is:
The last piece ever written by me
Inspired by you, your beauty
Cause you don't deserve my tears
Not afraid of the truth anymore
Won't live like that ever again
Hoping you'll open up to me
Writing eloquent poem after poem
While waiting by the phone
This is just a great write... and i'm glad I came back and read it again, and commented again because I see it in a much different light then I did before... I -
Such beauty in sadness...it is a song waiting to be sung.
Congrat's on the well deserved Gold!
mystic
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Dear Scorpio..This poem is the first I have read for awhile of yours, and it is heart wrenching. Do not say you will write no more poems! You will..Just wait and see, you will. I pray that love will be yours. You deserve it dear friend!
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I'm sure you have heard this before, but I hope this will not be your last poem. It is not only beautifully penned, but incredibly heartfelt and sad. I know what its like to be invisable *pretty much* to someone that you love so much... in a similar situation my self. I am certainly glad to have stumbled upon you. Remember that people can be incredibly stupid and blind when a great thing is right infront of them.. dont wait around for someone who will never come around...Other great things are out there, and you deserve them!!
Great Write.. and try to keep it up so your fans can read more.
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I guess I do believe that I deserve them
its amazing that you have come to me today Miss...maybe you ...your words can save me
As of late...I have felt that i am blind due to the love I hold for someone who doesn't see me...and i am missing out on the wonderful things in front of me
thatnks for reading...really means a lot
More than you know
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I love the lyrical feel of this poem...
I could almost imagine it being sung - and I love that.
You are a master of placing rhyme just where it is needed and not overdoing it.
This was so touching, so heart-wrenching, that I felt very drawn into not only the poem, but the poet and the situation.
Wonderfully penned! I'm going to have to look at more of your work!
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Thank you so much pretty girl!!!
I hope you read more as well and leave more of these heartfelt and insightful comments
Thanks again
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I really enjoyed this poem. I really loved these lines:
"All the inspiration simply drifted away
Like me from my sanity, each and every day"
I sure hope it's not your last poem, you are gifted. It is difficult when you lose inspiration. I like the images portrayed here. Keep up the great work
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This is a great poem I do hope that you will continue to write congrats on the gold best wishes and much luck
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Encouraging YOU!
A friend has come back to congratulate you for your gold! But it will not be your last poem.You have too much of that fire within you for writing, You have touched my heart, with your life...so write on poet write on, we are behind you! You have that ability to wrench tear the heart strings, but you are going to find love, and life being far more wonderful than it has!
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this is a very heart wrenching and sad piece.
Well written
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Thankyou very much Miss!!!
I think I will stop by to read more...especially when Im feeling...you know!
hahaha...
Thanks for reading
Much Love!!!!!!!!!
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I stopped writing for over a month.Even when ideas buzzed in my head I refused to jot them down.I know you are saying this metaphorically but still.As writers we will never stop writing because it is part of us.We are not whole without the ability to express and lay ourselves out on paper or should I say computer.Another quick note I know this was based on love but still.
Helen
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Thanks for reading Miss!!!
It was a true pleasure to hear from you again
Although Im not to sure what you mean to say in this comment
Did you like the poem?
Are you trying to keep me writing?
anyway...doesn't much matter
Thanks for taking the time to think of me
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ok. i haven't read the contest criteria. but i hope this is NOT your last poem !
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I finished crying, & i came back to comment..
Was it really ur Last Poem??
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i started reading this, and thought I'd better go do what's what first...anyway, I had to come back to read the rest of this beautiful piece you have so wonderfully wrought. Outstanding from over here as it is there with the gold.
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congrats on the gold, this is wonderful!
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So heartfelt this poem is. I remember feeling the very same way so many times! ~Sie
Keep penning...but please don't make this your last!
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Is this really your last poem?
It's beautiful, but sad. It feels like you can't let go... and you're holding onto the pain. And it's killing you inside. I'm going to cry!
I'm sorry. I'm just feeling very emotional... Because I feel the emotion inside this poem.
~Artemis~
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It is killing me
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lovely poem.
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Hahahaha...you bring tears to my eyes with your enthusiasm
Your words are to kind my dear
Thankyou so much and Im glad you enjoyed
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Better not be your last poem!! damnit! flippin' beautiful. I'm glad you won. It's gorgeous!!! love love love your style
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oh so pretty
Love poems always bring tears when the relationship ends ,sad but tells a story of friendship,keep up the great work PM
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This is amazing and being a poet, it really hurt. A good poem is susposed to affect emotions and you nailed it. Very well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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Amazing?
Honestly...I never thought a poet of your caliber would be at all interested in my work, never mind having such kind and supportive words to say about it.
And I think the reason why its emotional affect is so powerful, is because this may very well be my last poem
Thanks for reading beautiful girl
Much Love!
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hun a well deserved gold indeed and it was an intensely sad write at first i thougth you were leaving but im glad you arent leaving as you are a awesome poet and friend xxx but then i saw it was a contest .
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It recalled all the memories, so when i finish crying i'll come back & comment...
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It's almost a sense of an end...if that makes sense. I think that your finally getting alittle bit of closure and you need that.
This is truly a beautiful, moving piece and I thank you for being honest and expressing yourself this way. I can't even imagine what you must be thinking or going through to write this, but I do send out the warmest wishes of best for you.
Take Care
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Was a wonderful write...honest emotion...nice flow and the feeling was over-whelming! Great job! Best of luck!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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You have inspired me.
Wow... That made me feel heart broken. Very well done, I have to say. This is very strong. Wow. This poem makes me feel so down. That's amazing. I must tell you, I have never had a poem affect me in such this way.
This poem flows well, protrays the emotion, obviously, really well, and though the imagry was that strong, it was still amazing. The wording was also done rather well.
My favorite lines of this poem are:
"All the inspiration simply drifted away
Like me from my sanity, each and every day"
"Writing eloquent poem after poem
While waiting by the phone"
"Now that you're gone
Now that I am free
The words no longer come to me"
"Maybe I should shut up and smile
Because you are my friend
But I just can't help not to cry
When that's all we'll ever be"
Those lines really stuck me. They did so, quite hard, really.
Great job with this piece. You have inspired me greatly. Thank you very much. Good luck
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Thankyou so much for the gold
I can't believe I won!!!!!
Yee Haaa!!!!
lol
You're comment was beautiful, every encouraging!!!
To know that I inspired to you...well...I can't even describe the feeling.
Thankyou so much....
You are truely a sweet person
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Thank you. You are quite welcome. Congrats. I'm glad to have made you feel good. That makes me smile. Have fun writing and best of luck healing from the pain life gives us sometimes, as shown in this piece.
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What is cliche about it? Nothing, it's so filled with passionate emotion, you can't help but feel exactly what you are saying.
You really shine with expressions such as this, and maybe I love it because I know, and I appreciate it so much when you share yourself in this way, and I only hope that it helps heal, I know it will eventually. It's a great power that sometimes we don't realize we have, but sometimes just getting it out, can be letting it go.
It's truly beautiful, and I was drawn into every line.
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Wow..this made me cry. So sad...I could feel your hurt ache in my heart. With each word penned I felt a piece of you slowly fade away...until I reached the end and felt your emptiness. This left me feeling helpless. Unable to aide one who is hurting...a friend. Nothing I can say will ease your sorrow...however...just remember that you have to endure some pain in order to find and feel true bliss. Many hugs and well wishes. Great imagery in this one.
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