If I were a hero
I would start with them
The ones aged before their time
The ones who see things
They should never see
If I was a hero
I would save the child
I see crying for love
Because in them I see me
Always surrounded
But always alone
People say I'm strong
But it took so many tears
so much pain, and even now
It still hurts
I did it alone
They shouldn't have to
If I were a hero
I would be their's
So maybe they would have someone
If anyone is a hero
its someone who saves them
and protects all
No amount of money
can replace pride
or a life lost
But now that
I think about it
Seeing the world slowly
oh ever so slowly
die and suffer
I would give my life
to save them all
If I was a hero
I wouldn't care if the
world remembered
Just as long as I save them
That's the hero I would want to be
Author notes
Being eliminated from a contest sucks. It sucks even more when the poem means something to you. I hold this poem dearly because it is not only about me, but others i see. I have been a victim of abuse for about six years so I know what many people are going through. It kills me to see others especially children abused. Even more when they did nothing to deserve it. I know i'm ranting in this, but it's better then sending them an angry message i will never be able to take back. Well thanks for reading. Sorry if i scared anyone ^_^
A contest entry
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Any one can be a hero all you have to do is care
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With the posting of this piece I'd already say you are a hero...a hero for speaking out for all those children who have no voice of their own
Ruth -
beautiful write well done
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This is a sad poem. I was one of those kids. I was abused for a little over 6 years. And I am one of those who have faced horrors in my life that have made me see beyond my years and age well before my time.
Great poem.
- Justin D. Elliott -
i love this poem. and i believe just by writing it you became ahero to yourself. i truly am captivated by this poem, its simply and amazingly awsome.
If I was a hero
I wouldn't care if the
world remembered
Just as long as I save them
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i really like it when people will stand up for the small ones and try to shield them. i love how you say that you would give your life to save them. yes you are ranting but at least you admit it. thanks for entering good luck in the contest.
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This is a sad but uplifting piece, sad in the fact that anyone should go through the pain you are going through, I have been through it myself, but uplifting that you would be willing to use your pain to left others from theirs.... well done and good luck
Karen -
Hey Sia. One of the hardest things for any poet or creater of art to handle is criticism. This is mainly because artists put so much of themselves in their work. That being said, criticism, when done correctly, is designed to improve one's craft, not destroy it. As such, when an artist presents their work for critique they need to seperate the message from the form in their minds because it is the form that is being critiqued, not the message. Things like presentation, meter, form, flow, rhythmn, conveyence of the message, completion of the message, etc..
Remember that a true artist's goal is not only to create but to communicate through their creation. Communication can always be improved.
One Love,
John
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I'm sorry to say, but your poem's been eliminated from the contest.
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this is great
this is very understanding and i wud do the same it is a vary great write so keep it up it was inspirational
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Thanks
This poem is very personal to me, so it means a lot to have it appreciated. So thanks very much for the comment ^_^
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