So I'll forget about the feelings,
The ones I thought you had,
Those where the very feelings,
That at one time drove me mad,
I'll forget about the lying,
I'll forget about the pain
I'll forget and not think about
How you never knew my name,
I'll push away the memories
I'll push away the hurt
I'll push away the thoughts of you
I'll put them in the dirt,
I'll bury every thought of us,
I'll put them deep within the ground
I'll never cry another tear,
You'll never hear the sounds
Author notes
wow...pretty damn good i think
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excellent
this made me think and smile.......tell me did you take long to write this.Do viist me/read me/comment me. -
wow,it's brilliant i loved it ,so sad and hopeful,when you try to forget every thing abt some one,you have a very strong words in it..i hope you could forget indeed!!
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Very nice job on this one. I know what it's like to lose someone you love...the thought that they never loved you keeps consuming you and each beat of your heart sends a fresh wave of agony throughout your body. Anyway, great job on this poem it was powerful and full of emotion.
-Steve-
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this is such a raw and beautiful poem, the emotions they just hit the reader in the face, and for those who relate like me we thank you for coveying such feelings with such beauty! Keep on writing!
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Perfect
This is an amazing poem. It all makes sense because I can truly relate. You're well on your way to being the next big poet. Keep up the amazing work.
Sincerely,
LithiumNitrate
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YES!
The best thing to do is move on!!!! It's hard as hell to do what you are describing though, to bury all the memories..cuz you see something, or you smell something and instantly there they are again. You run into an old friend that don't know you guys broke and they ask...How's so and so....there they are again...hey i know your young but if you can teach me how to bury that crap I would appreciate it! -
i really love this. it just says so much and i can really relate. don't have anything else to say, it's left me a bit speechless.
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WOW. i like this one...
sorry i never posted anythin i promise i'll leave more comments
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omg this is freaking amazing! I really enjoy poems that rhyme like this. It just makes everything flow so well. I'm speechless, this is amazing!
I'll bury every thought of us,
I'll put them deep within the ground
I'll never cry another tear,
You'll never hear the sounds
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one word-W-O-W!!
i so can relate to this. i've loved someone almost my whole life and am not sure he knows. great write!!
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Beautifully done!!!
Deep & dark...
Great rhyme, rhythm & flow...
Full of raw emotion that makes it compelling to the reader...
A great write you have here...
Well penned, Well versed, Well done!!!
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So I'll forget about the feelings,
The ones I thought you had,
Those where the very feelings,
That at one time drove me mad,
I'll forget about the lying,
I'll forget about the pain
this relates to how i block off memoies of abuse. i love it
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This is so very amazing. Probably one of the best poems i've read in a long time. So many people could relate to the feelings you so clearly spell out in your work. It's just so beautiful.
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This is really good. I have felt this way before so this hits deep for me. great write!!
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wow I really like this, it's very easy to relate to, and the flow doesn't halt or catch at all. I like the way you start with 'so', it's unusual and makes me feel as though there was more before that, like this is just a conversation we walked in on halfway through. I love it xxx
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I'll push away the memories
I'll push away the hurt
I'll push away the thoughts of you
I'll put them in the dirt,
I'll bury every thought of us,
I'll put them deep within the ground
I'll never cry another tear,
You'll never hear the sounds
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