As I sit here
alone in this hallway
I begin to think about my life
part of me is feeling perfect
the other, however
is in shatters
I feel I can fly
or drown in my sighs
I could breathe under water
yet I can't do this any longer
please let me go
go away from here
I have to say no
please let me go
go away from you
all I want from you
to me
is to be set free
yet now, all I need
is to get the courage to say
I want to be set free.
Author notes
This poem is about a girl who doesn't want to love her ex-boyfriend, yet she can't help that she does. She wants to love this other guy, yet she can't for she still loves her ex. she wants him to let her go, but to no avail. she is lost, and confused.
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- The Pain That Love Brings by Sesheta.
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I know that feeling, not as intermitly as others though, mainly through seeing friends fall hard for someone then, go through hell, finally they have a chance for somethign new, and relise they are to used to hell and can't let go.
Beautifully written, very stark about a very real reality for many young and old people throughout our world, so many emotions flow from the page, and with so few lines you have spoken deeply and powerfully about a very raw subject for many.
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This is my everyday life lost and confused.This is a very nice poem i like these lines :
I begin to think about my life
part of me is feeling perfect
the other, however
is in shatters
I feel I can fly
or drown in my sighs
Good job with this
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Two typos: "i" instead of "I" and "bet" instead of "be".
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oh thank you
thank you for pointing those out to me!!!
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GASPIES!
Alright Nikki, enough is enough already! Everyone knows you can write better than me already now you have to write this one! it is beautiful hun, keep it up really, If you need to talk or whatever you know, message me sometime...
loves and laterz
^+_+^ Cado
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good from the heart
it sound like your on the verge of spreading you wing and flying about ready to break the bonds that tie you down but havent yet.You dont want to break the bond because they are safe (what we know always seems safe)but your yerning to strike out on new exciting adventures and grow and learn weather you suceed or fail.
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