Caught in an hourglass
I fall in the other half of life
Abandoned…Desolate. Broken
Trying to recollect
The bones from the ashes of time
Drained out of memories
People
Love
I fall granule by granule
Loosing my identity
To another life
They call
Death
!!
-June 28, 2007
-Neha
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Just a feeling that hits me at times..
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This is very very lovly. A shape poem that was ell put together poetically. I have never been good at these but this is one of the best I have seen.
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"Trying to recollect
The bones from the ashes of time...most attracting line....another beauty is seen in the form it has been compiled:if you truly look at it, its in the form of a heart..:tht really outlines the feeling of the poetess.though the 6th n 7th lines from the bottom , may be a bit confusing for the common gentry...
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So different that it is endearing...very well written...Keep it up!
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thanks.
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Very creative Neha. Looking at the other side of the hour glass in a new perspective now. Each grain is important to the hourglass, even if they have already slipped through. God bless you.
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thanks a lot.
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unique and diffrent love it
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thanks
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