I find my mind
blew through you
and landed stranded
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest 10 words, 10 entries, 10 min. by poeticweaver.
450 points, ended June 28, 2007, 8 entries
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The few words of truth - touched an soul today what a good piece to read. I enjoy your work
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Love this
short but sweet
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It must be my lucky day, poetically speaking. Every poem I have clicked on today I have enjoyed immensely, yours included. This is brilliantly constructed. Even the initial cursory glance (I always read and reread) was enough to influence and persuade me. It's a skillful creative swipe at the cerebrally challenged.
Although I detect a healthy sense humour in this, it also appears to convey a vague sense of disappointment, like meeting a beautiful woman who can't discuss Rimbaud or Ginsberg because she's not quite as bright as she first led you to believe type scenario........??
A solid write regardless. Wens ek was daar vir n paar weke, dis vreeslik koud hier in Skotland!
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Intriguing word play ...
and this concise poem brought to me a universe of references. The internal rhyme is perfect and auditive in beautiful sound and emotional swirls. And the "I" and the "mind" became separated in a way ... Perhaps it is sometimes a good thing to act on impulse and not on cerebral decision?
Ah. You clever one.
Love
Myra
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Ouch. Didn't get lucky huh? What an interesting way to write it though.
Beautiful sounds. I bet if you run this by her again you will not end up stranded!
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damn, that hurts, what a vivid picture.
all the best, Timothy
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