I'm approaching my end bit by bit
Every moment life's going far from me
Dripping minutes bring the cold silence of death.
So much I had to live for
Untouched satins of dreams do remain in the treasure
Much had I to ask for.
The reason of my living turns into my wish for death
Life has to end when roads do fold from feet
Night has to end when she brings the first ray in the dawn
And your beginning starts from my end.
A contest entry
- One Moment : Today Only by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended June 30, 2007, 17 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Lotsa emotion!
Holy Moly...nice write I could feel you saying the words in my mind it totally encompased me...as a fellow writer I say...keep letting it Ebb and Flow...
Nice Job!
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Natalie
PS. thanks for commenting and saying that it really encourages me and I'm always afraid to let someone else read my stuff but me being me I have to get someone's opinion or critisim before I go crazy...but hey, when you're a writer ...you have to be open to the fact that someone might not like your work...and you just need to say "Okay,I appreciate your input" But if you're like me you really want to say "Hey you, STUFF IT!"
haha, Nice Job!
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Natalie -
This is so sad and touchy, makes me sad too...great job!
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well written.. very cleverly done..I love the second staaza..There are few beautiful dark poems adn this is among those.
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Thanks a lot for commenting.
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Thank you for your entry in my contest. There were so many turns of phrase in here, playing with the words, having fun with the placement of language and images. I appreciate the ride in this one.
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wow ... deep dark write about the end .. well done
Night has to end when she brings the first ray in the dawn
And your beginning starts from my end.
especially this part .
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