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When a second lasts forever

soft
only a hop away from his lap
but I wait
and just enjoy his form
with my eyes
God I Love him
from his forever worn flat canvass'd shoe
to his upturned eyelash
And he looks at me
he looks at me
and I return the gaze
but only for a second
and we hold it
and it lasts
forever

A contest entry

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  • DAMSELx
    July 26, 2008

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    This actually gave me goosebumps at the end. I really did love this piece. "When a second lasts forever"....those are the best kinds of seconds.

    Thank you for your entry,
    --DAMSELx


  • Naridill gold member
    January 28, 2008

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    Short, sweet and simple - your words are effective and show through nicely. Very well penned.

    Thanks for entering,

  • tinytoes
    September 1, 2007
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    Excellent

    I found this poem said it all in so few words, congratulations on the honourable mention, well deserved. 

     

    The lines:

     

    he looks at me
    and I return the gaze
    but only for a second
    and we hold it
    and it lasts
    forever

     

    are full of emotion and love.  Great.

     

    Julie.


  • forbidden-colour
    August 12, 2007

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    Very sweet.

    thank you for entering, i like the thought of one glance to fall in love.

    very cute!

    all my love
    x--lullaby

    x


  • bloved
    June 29, 2007
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    wow...sometimes it only takes a simple glance to fall in love....this is truely a sweet write


  • celestial
    June 29, 2007

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    : )

    Aww. How sweet. This is very nice to read, and it was well-written. Nothing more romantic than a gaze that says it all.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 28, 2007

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    Awww what a sweet, loving, and most adorable write! This just makes me break out in the biggest of smiles
    All the best to you! Thank you for sharing!!!

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