His eyes watered
and the tear fell
slipped slowly
fluidly down his cheek
past the small space between
heartbeats and exhales
I watched it fall
into the groove of his neck
past the small beauty mark
disappearing forever
along with the boy
that gave birth to it
A contest entry
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Comments
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Nawr ~ such lamenting beauty - your words are passion and such brevity but worded with depth and beauty.
Thanks for entering,
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love the description
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Great write, very descriptive.
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I really wasn't expecting to read the first entry and truly like it, but yet... here I am, thinking those last four lines are something I want to say I've written. lol. Way to go... be the first to make me jealous
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Wow, this is amazingly beautiful.
Great imagery here...
I just love this.
Enough said.
Great job and good luck in the contest!
Amber
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Wow! Deep and touching. I can see the judge has their work cut out for them. These are some great entries. -Inc."
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