We cannot deny
The truth which inhabits the backs of our minds
It scars and it burns while sending icy shivers down our backs...
She never lied a day in her life
Never killed nor hurt nor partook of any action or event which might do someone an unkindness
She never took that which did not belong to her but constantly gave and gave to those around her
Silent, in the background
No one paid attention as she stood her ground out on the playground
An angry crowd
A pile of rocks
Hit after hit
Her strong voice saying "Stop!"
They killed her.
They killed her.
I repeat, rocking back and forth staring at my feet
They killed Kindness.
They killed God.
They killed Choice.
Choice.
To be or not to be.
To do or not to do.
To be a certain way or think a certain thing or do a certain action or deed.
To be yourself or someone else.
To drink coffee or tea.
Take the bus or walk down the street and three blocks to the left.
To make the call.
To say those words.
Choice.
To be content or want for more.
To take a hand or ignore.
To speak.
To live.
To breathe.
To love.
To die.
To keep it all in your head.
Choice.
They made their choice, but forgive for they know not what they have done.
Undwinding the world.
Unwinding our lives.
Cutting and unraveling.
Choice.
To make that which is something and holds every opertune moment one could wish and make it into nothing and not and that which wont only to enjoy the lack of torment.
To enjoy being right.
Right.
But unfortunatly, there falls no shadow
Where there shines no light.
Ha.
I win.
You lose.
Enjoy your eternity.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Know shadow without substance.
Undwinding the world. - spelling error?
"Correct" is also another word for right, carrying more connotations of punishment and interference, though it lacks any political undertones.
wont - won't? [wont being a word, signifying a lack of, a tendency to].
I enjoyed the change from the repetative "Choice" to "right". Nice lay out, and long-line/short-line difference, a strong start[for one educated in a Christian society], punchy blurts of info, and it leads the reader on well, evoking ethical consideration as intended.
The end is a bit out of left field though, seemingly personal resentment against a "me" that this reader did not know was involved, and presumptuous to boot.
Perhaps one might have rendered it (only a suggestion)
But unfortunatly, there falls no shadow
Where there shines no light.
Ha.
I win. You lose.
Enjoy your eternity.
...with a real question of that last "your"'s true place.
A good piece.
MA.
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this is a very intreging write and i'm curious as to what inspired you to write this piece. It seems to be specific yet I'm not quite clears as to what, but good job, I can sence the deepth of feeling you put into this piece. UNT
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This is deep ... very deep ... The things that are done in this life can be tortorous and mean, most of the time i agree that the things done are done so without thinking.
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