Can I be your shooting star wish?
I promise I'll come true
Don't look through the colors of the world
Love isn't just black and white.
I'm not just a shade of grey;;
The red hearts doodled on a page-
to the blue oceans;
and orange sunsets.
How could this not be love?
Gaze a little deeper
into the eyes in the mirror;;
they know you're hiding something
But [[baby]], Don't.
I'm all you'll ever need.
The yellow stars shine bright in the sky-
to the green grass we lay on;
and purple mountains
How could you not feel love?
Don't look past the colors of the world
you need to see more than just black and white
I'm not just a shade of grey;;
Can I be your pinky-promise?
I swear no crosses count.
Author notes
XdollfaceX forbidden love
A contest entry
- Forbidden Love by Ignis Corpus.
425 points, ended July 17, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lies And Crooked Wings ♥ by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended June 30, 2007, 11 entries
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321 points, ended July 1, 2007, 11 entries
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600 points, ended July 4, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Congrats on the gold you have won for this, but I personally feel it will not win in my contest. Thanks for entering though.
Chelsea
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Awww this is so sweet, all I can really say is aww, it's really touching babe! x
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OhMyGosh!! :
Can I be your shooting star wish?
I promise I'll come true
From the first lines you had my attention.
This is beautiful, I love it.
Thank you for entering and good luck!! -
i enjoyed reading this. thanks for entering my contest =]
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This is quite a lovely poem. It has a mysterious feel to it. My favorite stanzas were the second and third of your poem. The entire poem was written with apparent deepness. I also liked that you made good use of the title matching with the last line of your poem. This was very well written. Good luck in the contest.
- Andi
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Im not usually too big into these types of poems but you just changed my mind. I love this one. Great job.
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"Can I be your pinky-promise?
I swear no crosses count. "
Ooh, brilliant <3 -
"But [[baby]], Don't.
I'm all you'll ever need."
Ooo
That Bit Just Stuck For Me,
so Simple Yet Hard Hitting!
Good Luck And Thank You For Entering My Contest xx -
Can I be your shooting star wish?
I promise I'll come true
Don't look through the colors of the world
Love isn't just black and white.
I'm not just a shade of grey;;
wow, those lines are beautiful the poem is lovely and the flow is wonderful i liked this good job and good luc -
This is a great write! Good luck.
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this is a really great write! good luck in the contest and keep up the great work.
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