running in rain
snow
wind
any places
any faces
just another loony
walking among
the poor
the suffering
to destroy and abuse them
for their own selfish needs
who will save them
from the darkness
that has been inflicted on them
the brave peoples
that will fight for those
who can not in
this insane world
but they will suffer too
as blasts of fire
burn life
as fallen angels die
as heros are born
as humans are not born evil
just become sick and confused
blinded by hate and greed
promise of something better
when it never going to be ok
if you do it this way
the war is just not there
but is in every home
their is a stuggle to breath
to say it is ok
that tomorrow it is another day
that death will not come my way
praying to the heavens above
that it will not consume them
that the pain is not too much
more than i can take
that tomorrow seems lighter
that the dark clouds drift away
that the sky is blue
instead of so many colours
that this world could see
all the insantity
that they create around them
that hell was just in death
to the evils
instead of in this world
which will never change
because evils are blinded
they cant feel pain
frozen
dont know what a sin is
to them its just another day
its not a war
Author notes
well this is my attempt lol enjoy
A contest entry
- GIVE ME A WAR POEM by manoguru.
500 points, ended July 3, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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thxs
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this is a good poem. i like it a lot. i like how you worded things. great poem.
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thx you glad you liked it
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strangely i did enjoy it, lol. i read it with skepticism, but in the end i did like it... especially its incantatory effects produced by oratory devices like parallelism. for example:
"that tomorrow seems lighter
that the dark clouds drift away
that the sky is blue"
i found it very heartfelt and something suited for performance poetry.
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