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About A Phoenix

You nitpick everything
Fixate on normal behaviours
Turn them into faults
Magnify his supposed flaws
You simmer in jealousy
Dowsing any suspected flame
Yet at the same time
Reducing your own relationship to embers
Your ex now, he tosses the ashes
Watches them float away
On an ocean of the past
You, on the other hand,
Wallow in the ashes
Your own private phoenix
Or so you dream
For when something shining and pretty
Rises from those ashes
Your bitterness consumes you
Because that something doesn’t involve you
This time, I get the phoenix
And I appreciate him in all his glory
His exquisite expanse of wings
Hopes and dreams of riches
Will carry us both away to the sun
Meanwhile you continue on in the darkness
Phoenix into ashes, ashes into phoenix
Either way, leaving you alone
In an empty world
Chilled to the bone
With a regret you can’t hide

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Another old old write that I didn't feel like publishing before.

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  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    June 28, 2007

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    I think I know who this is about... *nudge nudge*

    I do think, though, that the background went very well with the feeling of the poem... Very well-written, albeit inaccurate. I would also like to point out that jealousy and hate are both very strong emotions, but they are both incredibly different. I liked it, though, even though I don't feel like it accurately represented the feelings in the situation. That is something that you have to be in those exact shoes in order to understand. It's as they say, 'to understand any living thing, you must creep within and feel the beat of its heart'. At the time, I was trying to care for someone, and he kept on telling me, 'no, you can't', and I just got fed up, because I was sick of him trying to control me. He pretty much told me that I shouldn't be with the one person I loved, and who actually cared about someone other than himself.

    I know he's probably brainwashed you, so that you don't believe a word I say anymore, but that is quite fine. I know in my heart what the God's honest truth is, and I think he does too.

    Well done.

    L.