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[[I tried loving needles and pills
I tried loving Mr. Absinth and his wonderful tales.
but nothing ever came close.]]
Somewhere in between last week's forever promises and this week's tear jerking melodrama's I could've sworn there was a piece of us that was going to last. With your hand down my skirt and my breath catching in between little sighs, I wanted nothing more than to be with you. Too bad My legs feel like her.
My lungs are tense, pacing through the hallways past your bedroom door, I can only imagine what breathing is like. Flashes of red curly hair cant leave my mind, I know you can't get past what I'm not.
And as unperfect as she is, and as god damn glorious as you make me sound, you know that I hear the underlying message of your words. I see the false expression of love that only wants to call her name. Your eyes are like the black board, and your heart is the chalk. You couldn't spell it out any louder if you tried.
Why can't I get you off my chest?
I purge in dark rooms of my tears, and I was once aware that you cared. But that ship sailed, and you forgot my fucking raft. So drop me flat on my face, & I can try even harder to win back what was always hers. what was always a lie. Stone cold, and bruised heart beats. Thumping out of my chest, We just had to give this another go.
I went as low as to blow you a kiss, that was never meant to see the light of day (right in between your legs).
I fucking hated my self before, but now It aches to not peel off my skin.
Fat chunks, of "baby I love you too" hit me soo damn hard I couldn't catch my breath when the real pain decided to show up. Cutting out my insides I discovered feeling something was better than feeling you(I try selling myself that). rejected rag dolls and over marked price tags, slip in through my fantasies and One more time I wil tell myself youre honest.
[[you are you are you are]]
replaced, ragged, and redundant.
Could I become anymore Fan-fucking-tastic
you thought so.
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Author notes
brokenwindupdoll
I dont know what this is, its a mix between the last boy, and this boy. Love is strangiling me. Last boy treated me like shit, but I loved him, this boy cant let go of her, but I love him.
ugh.. they might become the same thing.
A contest entry
- Yay for Options♥ by love tank x.
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Bronze trophy winner
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brilliant, that is such a good poem and so inspired
well done
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Wow. This was awesome. This is exactly how I'm feeling right now. Especially with the explanation in the author notes. I loved this. =] I can't even pick out a favorite part, it's that good!
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this is so beautiful too... i absolutely love it
And as unperfect as she is, and as god damn glorious as you make me sound, you know that I hear the underlying message of your words. I see the false expression of love that only wants to call her name. Your eyes are like the black board, and your heart is the chalk. You couldn't spell it out any louder if you tried.
that just made me cry on the inside out sweetie you're an incredible prose writer & this is also on the finalist list ♥
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how did i even forgot to applaud?? sorry babycakes xx <3
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im not gonna say stupid shit
even those theres a LOT of bitchy stuff i could say
but the only thing i shall say is
first loves never die -
wow
wow
Fat chunks, of "baby I love you too" hit me soo damn hard I couldn't catch my breath when the real pain decided to show up. Cutting out my insides I discovered feeling something was better than feeling you(I try selling myself that). rejected rag dolls and over marked price tags, slip in through my fantasies and One more time I wil tell myself youre honest.
just wow
this is wow
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"Somewhere in between last week's forever promises and this week's tear jerking melodrama's I could've sworn there was a piece of us that was going to last. With your hand down my skirt and my breath catching in between little sighs, I wanted nothing more than to be with you. Too bad My legs feel like her. "
ahhhhhh jesus christ this is....
just. fucking. breathtking.
god im glad you entered!
this completely blew me away. -
amazing is underthe tabel
broken is over the top
your sole is everything here- the rape thats felt- the loss of living for living for love.
can that ever take back what youve given?
realy amazing babe- and thank you for commenting on my other acount ScreamingForSilenc ( mad that one so my BF couldent read the poems that would make him craw all over me in tears... ugh) -
"I know you can't get past what I'm not."
love that line bbs.
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"Fat chunks, of "baby I love you too" hit me soo damn hard I couldn't catch my breath when the real pain decided to show up. Cutting out my insides I discovered feeling something was better than feeling you(I try selling myself that). rejected rag dolls and over marked price tags, slip in through my fantasies and One more time I wil tell myself youre honest. "
and the end was pure brilliance as per usual.
amazing dolly;;
I'm sorry =[
I understand.
sucks doesn't it?
ilyy, keep your head up beautiful.
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eep i know that situation all too damn well.
bottom line is; everything has to have its time to heal. its like a visious cycle!
i loved the emotion in this and i dont think i could have written anything close to this dollie bear; i love you & i know you can overcome any obsticle in this life; ily!
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