Walking down streets filled with cafe aromas
and the occasional jingle of a misfortunate cup.
Guitars being played for an extra buck as
lovers wonder aimlessly through their alley of
distinction.
Horns blaring and people making colorful gestures while
I laugh my inaudible laugh at how much I missed Atlanta.
Ever been to Atlanta?
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WONDERFUL!!!!
Isn't it strange just what things one misses as they think of a place they lived in and like.
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Very nice job ...
except that I'd change this line:
and the occasional jingle of a misfortunate cup. (an unfortunate's cup)
Otherwise, this is a great job.
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did you mean "wonder" or "wander". because knowing for certain which you meant decides how i'd interpret the line. as it is, i see lovers "pondering" in an "aimless" sort of way their particular union, what distinguishes them from any other couple.
i enjoyed reading this, especially lines 1, 2, and 3/4. i love watching your poetry mature as time goes on. it's a real delight.
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yah...
I actually thought about making it "wander" but decided to make it something else entirely...you know?...lol
why would it not be a delight...wasn't it a person I seem to know by the name of Erin A. Thomas that helped shape a lot of what my poetry is today? Or was I imagining things?
Kay Kay
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Yep.
You know you never really know what your missing till its gone. I lived in Atlanta and I miss alot of people there.Very nice. Reminds me of home.
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