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♥Treehouse of Love

 

Laying in your arms,

Gazing upon the leaves and sky.

Serenity surrounds me,

Knowing nothing could be better.

 

Our treehouse of love will never break. 

Strong just like us combined.

And mostly, our bond,

One that nobody but us holds.

 

When night approaches,

Know, your eyes are my light.

Your hands are all that guide me,

All that would lift me up if I'd ever fall. 

 

However, you never let me,

Holding me up with our strength.

I don't need materialistic things,

Your love is priceless, and all I want.

 

Your heart is purely gold,

I'm glad that I forever hold it. 

I'll continue to hold your world,

I promise I won't ever break it.

 

You ask me how I do it,

I do what I do, because I love you.

Also because we're each others' soulmate,

Perfect, amazing and beautiful as one. 

 

For every single thing you do,

I love you even more.

I won't let them hurt us,

Or try to break us down.

They can die trying,

And they will fail miserably each time. 

For, we will only become stronger. 

It is just you and me in this world,

Hand in hand, living our forever.

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  • catstar
    September 16

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    This is a great poem. It communicates a very strong love and the contentment and happiness in this poem are strong and heartwarming. Good luck in the contest.


  • CentrifugalCorpse
    June 23

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    Good emotion in this. Well-penned.
    Some lines seemed cliche, though, such as:

    "Your heart is purely gold,
    I'm glad that I forever hold it.
    I'll continue to hold your world,
    I promise I won't ever break it."

    I can see where you're coming from, but it's a tad cliche.
    Perhaps you could clean it up a bit with some metaphors?

    Other than that, great write.

    Thanks for sharing this piece and best of luck!

    New plague


  • AshesFromFire
    April 17
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    I get that its about acceoting someone...and that's great, but I think this hit a bit to far off the mark of what I was looking for in a poem. It's a sweet love poem. Very cute. It a very nice poem. All in all it has no real flaw. But, I'm truely sorry, its not exactly what I'm looking for. Youre a talented writer and I hope you keep at it! Best of luck in the future, and best of wishes!


  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 10
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    This is a beautiful heart-felt write. When I first started reading I thought, "wow, a love poem that isn't very cliche" but as I got more into the poem, it became more cliche. I think this could use more metaphors in it. I loved your emotions though. Great job and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 26
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    Aww, this is very beautiful and tender.
    Marvelous job on this piece.
    Bravo!!!

    ♥ Kate


  • Captain Jenny
    March 23
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    Wow. Beautiful. An amazing write. Thanks for entering

    ~Lae


  • cherrylollypop
    August 21, 2008

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    B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L-!....cant think of a better word to describe it. remindes me of how i feel for my friend,karla, cept we're only friends...
    thx for entering and good luck


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    Hehehehe! How frikkin' adorable! I loved the treehouse concept; it helps bring out the child-like aspect of love, how it keeps you young, no matter how long/old the love gets.
    "When night approaches,
    Know, your eyes are my light.
    Your hands are all that guide me,
    All that would lift me up if I'd ever fall."
    That just made me go 'awwww" Love ya
    Jeanette*~


  • Manee
    February 10, 2008
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    Oh, this was beautiful. Just...beautiful...


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    February 6, 2008

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    This is brilliant, my friend. It flowed so well, and I just felt such a rush of emotions... The whole write reflected the serenity in your soul, and I felt like I invaded your mind on a very personal level.

    Love, whether hetero or homosexual, is special and sacred, and should be treated as such. Love conquers all, and all that matters is that you love the person you're with, not his/her gender. Society may frown, but as long as you two have each other, you can take on anything!

    I'm glad you're at peace with who you are. Go you! All the best, and good luck in the contest!

    Laura
    xxx


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 15, 2007

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    That has left me speechless. Sums up the way I feel. Society is closed curtain in needs to open up and not be afraid of change. This piece really touched me because I can so relate. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • bonjourbunnie
    October 6, 2007

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    "It is just you and me in this world,

    Hand in hand, living our forever."

    I wonder if this means that you have no belief in an afterlife or that the afterlife and the current life are continuant into eachother.

    I really enjoyed this poem. The love and admiration that you feel for the person it was written for it brilliant and striking. I loved the imagery as well as the wording. Good luck in the contest


  • Artistic-Soul
    August 21, 2007

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    this is magical the imagry is enchanting and just wow im stunned by the power in the emotion that was put into this poem


  • Never Fall in Love
    July 15, 2007

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    "I won't let them hurt us,
    Or try to break us down.
    They can die trying,
    And they will fail miserably each time.
    For, we will only become stronger.
    It is just you and me in this world,
    Hand in hand, living our forever."

    I really don't know how to comment on this.
    It's so beautiful that I can almost feel the love being spread to everyone.
    I wish you both the best that life has to offer, 'cause you deserve it

    NeveR ♥

  • RottenXHeartX
    July 5, 2007
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    Beautifull
    Such a special place.
    Personification of the heart X


  • forbidden-colour
    June 28, 2007
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    Awwe!
    x


  • lady8
    June 28, 2007

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    Wow that is the best tree house in the world and to think of all the love wrapped with in...Beautiful write.Almost like a fairy tale love most people only dream about.

  • WendyK
    June 28, 2007

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    Wow that has to be the sturdiest treehouse around. How lucky. I liked what nightmare-anatomy said - If only the little lost boys had a place like this!

    I loved the end, I can picture tarzan and jane smiling hand in hand in their happy tree home.


  • Nightmare-Anatomy
    June 28, 2007

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    this poem is so vivid and magical. it reminds me of something that only exists in neverland. and the treehouses the kids sleep in. i loved your description of something so raree and precious--love. but i sensed through reading this poem that it was something even more than love. it was a passion and caring that only you the writer and your spouse could only understand. amazing poem. your words are tangled around my heart as i slowly melt into this poem making me wish i was one with what you have wrote. <3

  • MxA
    June 27, 2007

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    My sweet beautiful love, you're the greatest inspiration in my life, you really make a smile glow on my face, and*bawls* I love you sooooooooooooooooooo much, you leave me speechless this is beautiful and it makes me say what I always tell you, that I am the most fortunate person alive *cries* Look at what I have? You my beloved angel, you know material, gold, diamonds anything of so called"value" doesn't even come near to your worth, you're absolutely priceless I would live and sleep anywhere as long as I have you, you're all that I need, and want my everything, my world revolves around you, is yours, and you hold it well in your hands, brighten it with colors, and light, and beauty one that only you hold precious. A tree house with you is more beautiful and perfect than a palace angel, better than anything. This is just beautiful and remarkable angel I simply adored it, I adore every single thing about you, holding you in my arms, kissing forever honestly there's no greater paradise in then universe. Thank you for everything my love I love you sooooooooooooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!
    Forever and Always, just us


  • StarEyes
    June 27, 2007

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    Wow! Darling this is amazing!!! I love it!!!! Sounds like an amazing Treehouse to me!!! What a great job you did on this one!

    Love ya,

    Mom


  • Desire gold member
    June 27, 2007

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    Wow!!

    What a Treehouse
    Holy Moly

    Powerful piece You have penned and what images
    brought forth
    Wow!!
    Can feel the Love
    You express through each line!

    Thank You for sharing this Gem!

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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