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eyes so deep and fair,
poker-straight hair;
collar-bones jutting out,
luscious lips, forming a pout;
a smile, so deliberate and fake,
microscopic miniscule intake!
legs, long and toned;
no muscle, all bones!
sinners yet saints,
worshippers of nail paint!
who was Martin Luther, can't tell,
but swear on coco chanel;
cult of the ritzy - snooty,
bulimic beauties!
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Author notes
Beeyotch.. oops, Beeyootiful!*grins*
Option 2 ::-
Prompt:- 'Skin Deep'
A contest entry
- Skin Deep [in love with lies that choke through tears] by Naridill.
1150 points, ended November 3, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Plethora of One-Liners by Epilogue.
900 points, ended December 16, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A short and to the point poem! It shows how much emphasis we as a society put on labels, looks and image.
It has a nice flow to it, with great, unforced rhymes.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
Sunny
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Very thought provoking, a very truthful and intriguing write. The words are strong and really hit the voices honestly.
Thanks for entering and much luck
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i like it
just goes to show you all the pressure that the media puts on young girls these days. aside from that i do have a joke for you, i think you might like this one. theres this new restaurant chain about to open up thats especially for bulemics, theyre calling it the scarf and barf. moving on from said joke, great write and good luck in the contest. -
Very different from the other entries.
I like it though.
Thank you for entering,
Good luck. -
Wow what an excellent take on the prompt! This is a strong write and you have used excellent imagery to make your point. I like tha way you took the opposite to explain what you feel is beautiful. Well done and good luck in the contest!
Gaylene
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