On the bus to Loaves and Fishes
a little boy turned to stare at me.
Probably five years-old, big blue
eyes, he was cute as he could be.
Turned in his seat, toy car held tight;
he solemnly reached out a hand,
touched my hair as if it were silver,
which it was in that particular strand.
“You’re old,” he said in a whisper
reverence in his child’s sweet voice
“I know”, I replied with a smile,
“I don’t have much of a choice.”
“Are you an angel?” he next asked,
as I tried to keep my face straight.
“No,” I answered, far from it, little guy,
maybe I will be if long enough I wait.”
With serious countenance he asked,
“You’re pretty, when you die will you
come and be my guardian angel, please?”
And I can tell you folks, that’s what I plan to do!
A contest entry
- A Gift of Laughter, A Gift of a Smile by Heavenly Angel.
475 points, ended July 2, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for reading my work.
Comments
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This captures the compelling delight in children; when they are learning, drawing their own conclusions about what they here. This one has a beautiful soul.
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Excellent
You know this is good, don't need others to tell you!
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Aaaw!
How cute is that! And so beautifully and simply told, just as it should be, for a poem about a child's words!
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Hoodwink!
Oh what a delightful poem you have written here. It is a wonderful srory with great rhyme and rhythm and it is no wonder that you won the gold on this piece.
I truly love this!
Love & Light
Debbera
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If not truth, this rings of truth from the mouth of a child. Wonderful poetry and a joy to read...
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Wow this is so beautiful!!
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THIS JUST THE SWEETEST!!!!!
Out of the mouths of babes, as the saying goes!*angle*
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My
Such a delighful little piece of poetry. The child of innocence and the angel to be. Such a beautiful thought and idea.
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awww!!! this is AMAZING!
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Awe!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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i hate it
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Lovely!
This is an amazing write! So full of beauty and kindness and purity. Wonderful to read! -
Awesome poem! I love how it holds your attention from the beginning to the end.
aww! He's so cute!!! :-)
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AWESOME!!
oh wolfie this is the most precious poem I have ever read!! I adore this!!!! what an innocent little child he is. wouldn't it be wonderful if we all had a heart such as his?
Wow this is very very beautiful my friend!! AWESOME IN EVERY WAY!!
Silverbutterfly
(Mary
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this is very good
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Very cute. Happy trails
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I like it a lot
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Perfect title! Delightful story. I think it would flow better, and possibly be even more captivating, if the meter were consistent throughout the piece. What a precious event! Congrats on the gold!
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Aw wow i really like this poem Its incredibly meaningful and i hope everyone has a guardian angel ^.^
I love it!
'Dragontamer'
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This is so precious and I believe that you definetly will be his guardian angel. Worth all the weight in gold.
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I'm glad I went back and read this Wolfie! This is just beautiful and no wonder it won a gold trophy! Bravo!
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWW
This is ADORABLE! =D
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oh man this is awsome
what a beautiful write
i seen so much in this poem
it warmed my heart
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This is one of the most delightful poems I have read in a long time. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Such a warm and heartfelt poiem. I love it. I can see why it won Gold. It deserved it. Take care. Sandy
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I really like this poem the feeling in it is wonderful and makes you smile thanks for stoping by my page that means a lot lots of love SH
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Children rarely make mistakes in distinguishing who they feel comfortable with. As you showed in this poem they do not beat around the bush in telling people what they think of them. Only when their minds have been utterly distorted and their sharp witted innate perception has been reduced to a useless, rudimentary pulp inside the skull (which is common for adulthood), they begin making all the sorry and hypocrite mistakes grown ups make. When you become his guardian angel just make sure he doesn't end up like us. Thank you for creating and sharing. And congrats on the win. Take care,
AD
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awwwwwwwwww this made me smile too best of luck in the contest my new friend, I enjoyed reading this and I am looking forward to reading more
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Beautiful
That poem really made me smile, I do not think I have smiled in awile like that. Great write my friend!
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This is really good. You know how to bring a smile upon ones face. God bless you in all that you do. Love you and miss you.
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haha that was good .. Very nice.. Loved it
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This is so simple and lovely and as really touched a spot with me. I wonder if this is true, it just sounds like one of those rare things a child would say. With your permission I would dearly like to print this poem off to show to some of my friends.
Thankyou for sharing it with us and may I wish you the best of luck in the contest although in my eyes it is already a winner. Val
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You are sweet.
You may send it anywhere you like. He was such a wonderful
little guy and so serious. I just fell in love with him.
And I felt like an angel on that bus ride!
Wolfie
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Wow what a wonderful story. I so loved it in every way. It brought a tear to my eyes as I was reading it. What a wonderful moment in time to cherish always. Excellent write
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Awwww this is just soooo sweet!
Out of the mouth of babes, eh?
Thank you for sharing such a sweet and tender moment; I truly enjoyed this one!
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Awww how sweet. You aren't old mommy but I do think you are an angel. We can always use more angels in the world.
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