Carol Ann smiles as she looks in the mirror.
Gently placing a flower in her hair.
Touches up her makeup and mascara
And applies some red lipstick with care.
Admiring her new yellow prom dress,
The anticipation shows on her face.
Soon she would be dancing with Eddy.
Music playing...locked in his embrace.
Dancing all night in each other's arms,
Carol Ann would never forget this day.
Closing their eyes, they gently kissed,
As "their" song "Earth Angel" began to play.
They had plans to be married one day.
But for them, that dream would not come true.
Eddy was killed in action in Vietnam.
Carol Ann's spirit died that day too.
Carol Ann smiles as she looks in the mirror.
Gently placing a flower in her hair.
Touches up her makeup and mascara
And applies some red lipstick with care.
Admiring her now faded yellow dress,
The anticipation shows on her face.
The Spring Dance at the Nursing Home
Takes her back to another time and place.
She places a request for a song.
Soon, "Earth Angel" begins to play.
Carol Ann is dancing with Eddy again.
She is blissfully lost in yesterday.
A contest entry
- Write Away by Legend.
1000 points, ended July 4, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A beautiful dress. Exquiste, beautiful poem.
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Exquisite, beautiful, significant lol
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Thank you for the nice comment and applause!
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Very sweet
Best of luck -
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Thank you!
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You're welcome
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such a sweet poem!
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Nice Poem
Such a sad sad poem. It is always sad to lose the one you are going to marry. Your life is never quite the same. Lovely poem. Best of luck in the contest. Take casre. Blessings Sandy
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Like how this kinda combines two of the titles, and the repetition of the 1st stanza is very effective, this poem tells a very sweet story
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Thank you for the nice comment. I do appreciate it. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. ~ Sue
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a very touching poem ... very emotional ... a great twist towards the end of the poem pushing the tear-glands ... a wonderful job on this prompt ...
maa
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Thank you for your thoughtful comment. I always seem to end up writing emotional story poems with a twist. Thanks also for the claps. ~ Sue
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This has a charisma all it's own.
The flow is wonderful, tugging you along by heartstrings. Best of luck to you, Blue -
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Thank you, Blue. I appreciate your nice comment. Hope your heartstrings didn't get pulled too hard.
~ Sue
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You've penned these sad words so beautifully, and so very descriptive. You have stood the reader right in front of that mirror with carol Ann and shown us the happiness and then the sadness. A truly beautiful, sad write. Well done and good luck with this lovely entry for the contest.
Shaz xx
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I was in the mood for something with a bittersweet ending. I hope it wasn't too sad
Most of my personal writes are more cheerful Thank also for the applause. ~ Sue
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Heart breaking
Oh my. So very moving and touching. You have pulled the strings of my emotions with this one.
Well done. An excellent use of the title and a wonderful entry. Best of luck. ~Pamela 
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Thank you Pamela...I hope it wasn't too depressing. I was in a kind of bittersweet mood. I appreciate your thoughtful comment. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks also for the applause. Take care ~ Sue
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Such a sad but lovely poem .So many lived and some may say wasted years.I am sure that this happened to quite a few people in all wars.A lost love that could not or did not want to be replaced An excellent entry to the contest Thank you Good luck
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Thank you kind sir. I just had to kick my muse in gear when I saw your contest. I've been kind of busy lately. You are so right about loves lost in war. I remember when I was a teenager and worked in Woolworth's...there was an older 40ish woman whose fiance had died in WW2. She never married, never dated and never smiled. Very sad. War has so many victims. Thanks for your thoughtful comment. I'm glad I managed to come up with something for your contest. Cheers! ~ Sue
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