Shattered words of my poetry
The last written page of my diary
The broken wings of the fairy of memory
Remind me the day
The day, you left me and went away.
Every now and then
When I see my reflection in the mirror
It reminds me of your departure.
The snow white attire tell me you are nowhere,
Nowhere on the earth near or far.
Distant future stares at me
Now past remains awaited
After your departure an uncertain journey has started.
A contest entry
- ~Have you looked into your heart?~ by Sweetangelgrace.
425 points, ended June 29, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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distant future stares at me
really hits home
i'm about to change just about everything in my life and this is quite fitting for my frame of mind
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The title sounds hopeful "Starting from the End", but then the poem turns out opposite. Are you mastering is sad poetry?!?! I loved this poem. Nothing to mention as specific, I liked all the stanzas. But in second stanza I think usins dots were not necessary. Just end that with a period. And give a comma in the previous line, it will be ok.
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Thanks for the suggession dosto.I'll fix it now.
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Ouchhhhhh..it really hurts!!!
I feel speechless and breathless!
This is a sad piece and very touching. You make me cry!
I wish you love, peace, light and pleasure
Keep up the good work!
GRACE
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Thanks for feeling it from with in.
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This is a very good poem.
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Thanks a lot for reading and commenting.
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Very beautifully penned dear... full of emotions and feelings.. All the best in your contest.
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Thanks for your comment my friend.
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