I'm angry right now, wouldn't you be?
But I still want you to know what you mean to me
I know you won't read this, now that you're dead
But I will tell you the things I could never have said;
I think of you all of the time
I've always wished that you were mine
You enter each and every dream
I'm in love with you it would seem
I'm jealous of everyone else you love
But now you're watching from up above
I miss you whenever you leave
Now you're gone forever, but I can't grieve
My mind is numb, my heart is cold
In these few days, I've grown so old
When you were here you hurt me so
But that pain was better than watching you go
So now I sit here, into space I stare
On my finger, it is your ring I wear
It still hasn't hit me yet...
You were the most perfect friend I never met.
And now you're dead, and my hope is gone
The end of this, your life is done
But it was too soon, so now I cry
I never got to say Goodbye;
I never got to look you in the eyes and say
I love you more with every day
I've never felt pain such as this before
And it just keeps hurting ever more
So you see it is not only yourself you kill
But I still love you and I always will
I will miss you until the end of time
So much darling, that there is no rhyme
That sums up how I feel for you
I love you, and I bid you adieu.
Author notes
This is meant to fit the category 'How to say goodbye, to someone you cant save' but I'm not sure it does really, so sorry if it's a waste of your time...
Option 3/4
A contest entry
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i really like this write but the ending seemed kinda dry for my taste, but a good write nonetheless. i love your word usage and how you made your words just drip with emotion. thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest
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I could definitely feel your emotions almost perfectly. I got so angry while reading this. It was written really very great! Two things though. One is the line "You were the most perfect friend I never met." would that be more "You were the most perfect friend I've ever met?" And also, in the 3rd to last line you said that there is no rhyme, and yet the poem continues to rhyme. I dont know,maybe it would be pretty cool if it didn't. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!
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No it's supposed to be never met.
And the reference to there being no rhyme is like saying, I can write this poem, and it can rhyme and sound good, but it won't ever be enough to get across how I feel. Its basically a reference to how useless words are in certain situations.
Hope that clears it up a bit, thank you for your comment.
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Wow this is such a strong piece. I really loved it. It is so hard to loose someone, especially when you never get to say goodbye. All the lost opprotunities, and chances we have, sometimes we just never find the time to say "I love you".
Amazing write, and good luck.
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this is a beautiful poem and im sorry for your lose. people who commit suicide are selfish for they cause those who love them so much pain. this poem is not a waste of my time. good luck in the contest and keep writing
Thank You For Entering -
Beautiful
Reading this gave me such a big lump in my throat. I too loved someone very dear... But he left my life, with no warning, no good-bye, no sorry... no matter how hard I try I will love him forever..saying goodbye would have to be the hardest thing I have ever had to do... Giving myself permission to say it was almost impossible.. It almost felt like betrayal.
Thank you for sharing this piece, I will have booked marked as I feel I would like to read this over again.
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