We will meet again when parallels agree.
I’m sure of it, so sure it hurts.
Rest assured, I was born to burn
and you will with me,
and you will with me.
Oh, my skin could never make it
across the cold still-born sea.
There is only longing, only yearning,
No sense, no sign of breaking free.
I liked you better when you were a stranger
but now I can't put you down.
Come here and let me get a taste,
just one just, one taste.
Come here and let me get a taste,
just one, just one taste.
Make a fool of me forever, I don't care.
I like it here, in a triangle.
Hey, I've played the part long enough,
I've got it, I’ve got the picture.
I fit in your box perfectly.
I made a friend with you watching.
Saw her strung up like a strand
of weighted pentagrams
and passed out against a picket fence.
Her backbone, her support system.
God it kills me,
living this ugly,
giving myself to nothing
but the vodka in the cracks of her lips.
It'll fill every crevice eventually,
wait, just wait, and you'll see,
you'll see.
I liked you better when you were a stranger
but now I can't put you down.
Come here and let me get a taste,
just one, just one taste.
I liked you better when you were a stranger
but now I can’t put you down.
Come here and let me get a taste,
just one, just one taste, just one.
We will meet again when parallels agree.
I’m sure of it, so sure it hurts.
Yes!
Yes!
Rest assured, I was born to burn
and you will with me.
Please tell me what you think
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Great write
sounds like a rock song, and considering the subject i guess that fits? I understand the need far too well-couldn't ask for more than this, strong, defiant, keep it up xx
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I absulutely Loved this Piece........
so much emotion in your words.......
I love these type of poems!!!!!!!
how you make me feel as if i was actually there
in that moment........
Not many people can capture feelings
as well as you have in the poem.......
How every line flows nicely into the next......
great write!!!!!!!!!!!!
I cant wait to read more of your poems!!!!!!
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Thankyou lisa :)
I greatly appreciate your comment.
xSynth
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This has the feeling of a song attached to it, with some of the repetitive phrases such as in the first and final stanzas. I loved that feeling, because it made the poem move very surely and easily, without me feeling like I'm stumbling to connect them. And the last stanza was easily my favorite here. The "yes yes!" was so intense, despite how simple the words are, that I almost felt like yelling it out loud myself.
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Thankyou
Sorry I didn't catch your comment until now. But yes, it is more like a song with a chorus to repeat.
And I'm glad you understood the 'yes! yes!' part. I was hoping it'd make the reader want to yell it out loud because I was whilst writing this.
Thanks again
xSynth
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Lol this is a great write... what a desire to drink! i really love this piece.. and the use of the title in the 2nd last line is awesome.. i love these lines
Make a fool of me forever, I don't care.
I like it here, in a triangle.
Hey, I've played the part long enough,
I've got it, I’ve got the picture.
I fit in your box perfectly.
I made a friend with you watching.
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Thanks:)
I appreciate you taking the time to read this, really.
And yeah, such a desire to drink. It's a weakness of mine but I've been working on it. I'm not such a wreck now as I was when I wrote this.
Thanks again
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i liked it... i dont drink, but it seems to me you love to.. it is an escape for most people, a very bad escape i might add, but it takes the pain away for a little while.. and i guess thats all that really matters.. i wish that we could all have a little harmony in ourselves and be consious of our actions and reactions and know that there is a consequence to every thing, but we dont, and we probably wont.. hell we probably cant.. i get what im saying, so i apologize for any confusion.. and plus im just going to shut up now anyways, nice write though
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