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Whispers of Sunrays

Missing image
The light
draws my
breath

(with caressing thoughts)

whispers of
sunrays saturate
vivid dreams
on a rainbows
edge

(across the universe
it can be heard)

balmy breezes blow
as I dance with
myself in infinite
dreams

the hole hiding
in my soul seems
distant

outside my
silhouette
nothing else
matters

(a question of lust)

one lost moment
when the music
stops

I melt into me
with the scent of
perfumed sheets
lingering ~

Author notes

She took a long journey...lol

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  • RatherImaginative silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    Beautifully written! I loved your imagery!

    "balmy breezes blow
    as I dance with
    myself in infinite
    dreams

    the hole hiding
    in my soul seems
    distant

    outside my
    silhouette
    nothing else
    matters"

    Loved these lines especially.


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    More than sunrays shining in these lines - highly sensual and what a flow - climatic ending to this journey of self discovery.


  • FelineMuse
    July 3, 2007

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    "balmy breezes blow
    as I dance with
    myself in infinite
    dreams"

    I read this part and the word "sultry" popped into my head. I like the lines... and the word "sultry."


  • nays-lil-boat
    July 2, 2007
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    beautiful.

    the wording you used showed pure bliss. lovely

    nay x


  • RedAquarius
    July 2, 2007

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    This is damn good. Your usual fantastic word choices create such rich imagery. I particularly enjoyed:

    "balmy breezes blow
    as I dance with
    myself in infinite
    dreams

    the hole hiding
    in my soul seems
    distant"

    Well-done!


  • soldiersoul gold member
    June 29, 2007

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    she took that long journey and didnt even stop to pee lol...good job MOMMA ZOCH good luck


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    June 28, 2007

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    Beautiful, what a grand picture you have painted for the reader in this one hun, such beauty trapped in these lines that you have let escape and roam with brilliance

    Karen


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 26, 2007

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    "whispers of
    sunrays saturate
    vivid dreams
    on a rainbow's
    edge"
    I love this and the title - great poem


  • aliceramone
    June 26, 2007

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    Wow!...a sensual picture you have penned here dripping the journey into climax...good alliteration and I love the ending...an eloquent hot write

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