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Loving Mastery of a Sin

The ecstasy of a righteous rage is like drops of life filling me to my frame.

Unbound fury burning like a blissful flame
caressing me like a lullaby
and leaving me in a childlike daze.

Hazel fire running throughout my veins-stimulating.
This divine wrath keeps me ahead of the game.

Wallowing in this so called sin-I live.
Having given me new life-its gift,
When so many have forsaken it.

Sated-a soul was its gift.

Author notes

Name-Bes'uliik
Sin-Wrath(anger)

Think of Wrath as an actual entity instead of an ideal.Much like the force in the Star Wars universe.Here I pretty much wrote of it...with it being helpful and a tool.Much like a Sith would regard it.lol.anyways.hope everybody likes!

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  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 26, 2007

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    Great poem! I think there is such a thing as righteous anger;however, usually anger is just someone taking their bad feelings out on someone else.I hate getting angry.I try not to.It makes me feel terrible!


    • Hiddenspaces
      December 26, 2007
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      yes you are right most of the time...unless someone has the ability to control their anger(usu ppl that have anger probs that take control) than they can "summon" it up to use whenever they need it...i know i do when i lift weights and or to defend myself...and thank you for your input.happy holidays,
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  • Lute
    December 26, 2007

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    content 7.2
    vocabulary 8.07
    accuracy 7.5
    creativity 7
    theme 6.9
    originality 6.8

    totals: 43.47


  • torieshawesum
    October 22, 2007

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    this is awesome... love the vocabulary and stuff ((not many people use big words anymore))
    thx for entering and all that other stuff im supposed to say to you.


  • Lost Memory
    August 22, 2007

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    great write... i liked the connection to star wars too.... i wouldnt have thought of it that way.. keep it up ^^

    ~Nick


  • Nature Song silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    Sith-lord the master of demise and sin! My son Kyle would agree with this poem! I think you conveyed what you felt, and this was a great write my AP son indeed! Love your AP mom ~Sie


  • Trust Calvaire
    August 11, 2007
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    good job


  • ShotgunSherri--
    July 28, 2007

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    wow
    great poem
    very deep and truthful
    nice similies
    x.x.x

    ♥†♥


  • RedAquarius
    July 2, 2007

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    Some great lines and imagery in there, first line rocks, loved "hazel fire" - Welcome to the Dark Side, Luke!


  • FelineMuse
    June 29, 2007

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    "Unbound fury burning like a blissful flame
    caressing me like a lullaby
    and leaving me in a childlike daze."


    Interesting lines. It's almost like the anger is calming and soothing


  • aliceramone
    June 28, 2007

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    great piece here and I am not a big star wars fan but my son is and I could relate it to the dark side...well constructed with an almost romantic imagery towards anger and vengance...thanks for entering this piece and good luck in the contest

    • Hiddenspaces
      June 29, 2007
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      thanks...to tell the truth i wrote it while reading a star wars's book.so yea i just had this great idea...and well here is the result.always a pleasure to enter in the contests.and thank you again...


  • cordova
    June 28, 2007

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    yeah i reckon the 1st line is awesome kinda like you dropped a lit match onto a puddle of petrol nice


  • autumns rising
    June 27, 2007

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    dude this is amazing. One of the best by you! it opened with a bang, i love it!
    "Hazel fire running throughout my veins-stimulating.
    This divine wrath keeps me ahead of the game."


  • Lost In Dreaming
    June 26, 2007

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    wow--i really like this--we should try writting our sep poems while talking on the phoe more often cuz it seems to work for us--good luck in the contest

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