Slipping into an unknown void
Pushed beyond the limits of truth and lies
Falling below to the depths of betrayal
Words freeze in my throat
Exstingushed by fear
Brought about by memories
The smile that was once in your voice
That loud, noisy laugh
Happiness in your eyes
Landing in shattered dreams
Dusting off my hopes
Living in the moment
Author notes
Slipped Away, Avril Lavigne
A contest entry
- Musically Inspired by poetsruletheworld.
1800 points, ended June 27, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwinked
I like your unusual imagery. One of my favorite libes are these: "Words freeze in my throat
Exstingushed by fear
Brought about by memories" -
Hood-Winked!
An encompassing piece, spilling with emotion that affects the readers mood...I see this was inspired by a song, you have done well, with some super crafted lines, inparticularly the second stanza with it's metaphors...keep on writing, what ever
You have been hood-winked by a Bandit
~Lilac
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Hoodwinked
Oh I like this one. It has some wonderful lines within this. You did a wonderful job with this sis. Keep it up.
Never give up
Kate
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Hood wink
Beautifully expressed here. Yes whe things just seem to slip between our fingertips... I'm all too aware of that happening. Wonderful write. Keep up the writing and carry on with the abstract/dark approach. -
Hood-Wink
Lovely wrods written in lines that flow with ease and have great imagery Wow the saddness adds true life to the write so well done love the title too... P.S. You've been Hood-Winked by the Poetic Bandits
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Hood-Wink!
Wow, such a sad poem about a love lost. So full of emotion and pain. I could feel all the love that you have for this person. Hopefully with time it will get better
You have just been Hood-Winked by a Poetic Bandit enjoy your day today
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I love Avril and this poem is wonderful!
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Wonderful write, thanks for entering.
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