Witchery.
Her facial features flawless
Never ending flowing hair,
Various shades of ebony
Unblemished skin the color of icy melon sherbet
No mark, no bruise, no cut.
Not a hint of sin committed in the past
Her dazzling smile might forebode the unpredictable -
Doom.
Or it simply hypnotizes, captivates, mesmerizes you.
Her swirling milky eyes, they are difficult to interpret.
One second they are
Flashing.
Unnamed colors, undefined sensations.
The very next moment,
A sluggish, stagnant whirlpool of circular motion,
Emotions and feelings churning
Unstoppable.
Perpetual.
Ally of all phantasms, fauns and unicorns dance in her wake
As she strides across feathered dunes
Frosted with fantasy ice,
Sprinkled and peppered with splashes of
Silken rain.
You think that she’s on your side… or not.
Benign. Harmless. Innocent
Is she malignant? Or is she not?
Malevolent. Spiteful. Hating.
Is it ONLY magic?
Witchery...
Author notes
AAARRRGGHH i hate freeverse!!! this kind of topic is too serious for really happy bubbly rhyming like the stuff i usually do. (see my other poems to learn what i mean by that ^.^) i just don't think i'm good at freeverse. all my trophy poems are rhyming! oh and if you're wondering -- i added punctuation to enunciate the effect. simple periods are enough to foreshadow impending doom. hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under ONLY ~ Fantasy Poetry (Word Bank Option) by Amunet Wolfbane.
425 points, ended July 5, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
is this good or is it just a piece of *poop* ?
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u underestimate urself
this is great! it is descriptive and captivating. slightly creepy of course but that is goooood. i like it when u write freeverse. keep it up!
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Wow, Sasha, this is excellent!!! and you say your bad at freeverse, eh?? heh. because your not. all the words incorporated into the poem flow
"You think she's on your side...or not" terrible sense of foreboding and doom and demise. I love it!!!
Keep up the writing. -Tay-
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I think it is a very interesting poem as it shows the contradictions in witchery. You're use of adjectives are exceptional. Only problems I see are a few disconnected pieces in construction and the "icy melon sherbert." LOL! Anyway, overall it is great for your first free verse poem.
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Incredibly descriptive. Well done. I did enjoy this one muchly :D
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This is not
and HEY i am a fee verse and it is very good but I feel insulted because I like free verse. I like it huggles and see ya saturday
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IT IS NOT ! it's great! icy melon sherbert...milky...feathery dunes...peppered...it's fantastic! great! fabulous job. the wordbank really helped. i think you'll get a trophy for this one
Lise
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i don't think this is a piece of as you say. i can tell that you don't usually write poems like this though, because of the "icy melon sherbet" in line five.
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