Before the dawn, my life will change
This one night, this one act
The night giving way
Secrets guide the darkness
Sleep grabs at me
Fear pulls me awake
Infected with horror
Twisted to insanity
Voices tortmenting me
The clock ticks by
Time such an evil
Breaking me
A contest entry
- Take It and Run by Starcrossed Dreamer.
450 points, ended June 27, 2007, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hoodwink
Great write yet again sis. Nice imagery and emotions all through the piece. Great write. Keep it up.
Never give up
Kate
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Hood-Wink!
I can so relate to your write. I try to stay awake at night to keep my past demons from invading my mind. Excellent imagery and emotions throughout. Excellent write
You have just been Hood-Winked
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WOW
This just may be my favorite poem by you!
It's so simple and yet so strong and meaningful!
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In the second triplet, "Sleeps grabs.." I don't know if that's intentional or not... I won't dock, but I just though I'd point it out.
Otherwise, I really do like this one. Very well written. I love its simplicity.
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/Before-The-Dawn-lyrics-Evanescence/AA78ACBDF5384AB748256D73000565F3
The original lyrics if you don't have them.
Best of luck in the contest. Thank you for entering.
Dani
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